Drop the link! let's review each other's work

Agnivrat03 2025-04-25 13:28:06 UTC #1

hello guys, i'm agnivrat currently working on novel named Child Of Prophecy. There are only 7 chapters out for now. Read it and give a review and drop the link of your work as well. And guys let's not give a fake review to anyone it would only take a few minutes to read 1 or 2 chapters so let be brutal and help each other out.
Here is the description and link of my novel
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5000 years ago, an unknown being calling itself the Servant of Nihir, the Divinity Reaper, descended upon Earth. He unleashed unspeakable havoc on the city of Trigarta. Thousands of people fell victim to his unstoppable carnage. He spared no children, women or elders.

The rampage ended when humanity’s two greatest warriors Emperor Agnivardhana and Sword God Divyajit united against it, igniting a battle that shook the heavens and earth. This marked the start of a desperate war for survival between Nihir’s dark army and mankind.

Millennia have passed, and the struggle still continues. But for Aksh, a boy trapped in the slums, the war beyond means nothing. His real battle is at home, against a monstrous father whose entertainment lies in abusing and harassing him, his mother, and his sister. Every return home brings fresh horrors.
Yet, everything changes when a mysterious voice within him begins to call him the child of prophecy. From that point, Aksh unknowingly started gathering the attention of allies and enemies alike and was soon pushed to the centre of everyone's attention.
What is this voice inside his head? What prophecy is it talking about?
Join Aksh on his journey and let's find out together why is he called child of prophecy.

The_Chosen_Z 2025-04-25 20:29:34 UTC #2

Tks

Agnivrat03 2025-04-26 12:16:52 UTC #3

Hello fellow creator, I looked at the first chapter of your series, the art is quit beautiful and nice. The facial expressions of your characters are also fine, and its just a suggestion from my side that the comic can be even more interesting if you put more efforts to the background as well and since I can't read the language you have written so i cant exactly give you the review about your story

Yunatsuki 2025-04-26 16:56:17 UTC #4

Hello

If you like BL and action novel, here is mine

Genre : action, BL, drama, crime and fighting

Plot : Gwenval, a gifted musician, and Ashlay, a young entrepreneur, will learn to love each other as they fight against their inner demons and many dangers.

The_Chosen_Z 2025-04-27 02:35:42 UTC #5

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Branking 2025-04-27 04:26:20 UTC #6

Please leave comments or reply here with your reviews! I'll do the same !

The Voidbound Goddess Who Took a Mortal Boy

Twelve-year-old Kevin witnessed a stunning, otherworldly goddess who came to retrieve his brother’s soul. Despite his fear of her overwhelming power, he crossed the rift by grabbing his brother’s feet — and was dragged into the World of Ever-After.
Lady Seraphina, guardian of Ever-After, realized too late that she had accidentally kidnapped a mortal!
Now, catastrophic consequences are in motion.
His brother’s sacrifice.
The vengeance of the "Red Smoke."
The wailing of the Seven-Headed Mother.
Beyond the Void lurk the corrupted Divine Entities...
What can a mere boy do when faced with challenges beyond mortal comprehension?

Agnivrat03 2025-04-27 05:00:17 UTC #7

I read your novel and gave a review about what i felt in the first chapter of your series. If you want review on any specific part like character depiction, world building , or anything else feel free to tell

primehkm 2025-04-27 07:38:46 UTC #8

Here's mine!

ShadowNova2024 2025-04-27 08:09:08 UTC #9

Agnivrat03 2025-04-27 09:03:17 UTC #10

I read first 3 chapters of your novel and you might find it harsh but I'll tell you the things that are good with your novel and the things you need to work on without sugarcoating anything. The opening was fine, Ryo is a kid who likes to write when all the kids of his age are preparing for some war. But firstly you need to break your sentences a little bit. There is tone of going on in a single sentence. You should break it so the readers can read it more easily and secondly your chapters are way too short. It is fine if your novel isn't long strip (likely under 50 chapters) but if not consider increasing number of words per chapter so when readers read a chapter they would feel that something actually happened in the chapter.

primehkm 2025-04-27 10:50:25 UTC #11

Hi there thanks your review! The novel will likely go for 500-1000 chapters according to me. I tend to write slow paced and short chapters which is mainly the reason why I release multiple chapters so the reader's don't feel bored or feel that there isn't enough content. As for the rest, I do agree that my initial chapters have a much more faster pace and it feels too ungrounded. My actual draft is currently at Chapter 70 and I think that the pace smoothens out around Chapter 40 and the flow becomes more natural. However I do plan to redo a few of my initial chapters!

Once again, thank you for your feedback!!

KevinReijnders 2025-04-27 13:32:45 UTC #12

Always interested to hear folks think.

One thing of note: The earliest bits of Chapter 01 are already over 5 years old

Agnivrat03 2025-04-27 15:01:42 UTC #13

Hey ShadowNova24, I read the first chapter of your novel. I'm glad that you didn't follow the same reincarnation or isekai stuff but came with something new. Your character if I'm correct is a humanoid wolf breed. You have a good foundation for your novel with only this much. But there are some things I would also like to point out. Firstly there are various grammatical mistakes in the first chap, I don't know if it is same for the latest chap as well. In some places you have written 'were' as 'where' and some sentences didn't have any full stops as well. And you also give a load if information dump in the first chapters that readers won't be able to remember. Instead of giving so much information in the first chapter, you can give it slowly while building your world so users can also get attached to it and the last thing You are giving way too much details on every single thing just like explaining the features of the wolf clan, there is so much you told about them that i skip half the part of it while reading. You can make it small and precise as well And at the end its just my point of view.

Kyanbu 2025-04-27 16:11:21 UTC #14

I've been looking for more reviews and feedback recently. I'm getting close to the half way point of my story.

"Spirits are swarming Lucidia Island! As it's people take shelter. Three groups set out to investigate the incident. Each searching for their own answers."

Agnivrat03 2025-04-27 17:44:18 UTC #15

Man your art is so cool and if you are doing everything from coloring to drawing alone then it's even more impressive. You have focused on the background in detail as well. Every character have a clean and distinct facial features and there voice also sound distinct. And as for any suggestion I think I need to read more of your chapters for that. I have subscribed you. I'll read your comic and after reading enough chapter I'll provide you a detailed review under one of your chapter.

KevinReijnders 2025-04-27 20:39:08 UTC #16

Thank you so much, I'll be looking forward to your scathing review then

NGChloe 2025-04-27 21:30:43 UTC #17

I read your first chapter and I'm really impressed. You put a lot of effort into creating a sense of mood and culture. Its incredibly ominous just based on how you formatted it and the other little details help build that as well. The sense of culture is really impressive, I'm curious if the names you chose were real or made up, because they seemed really authentic, just not to a culture in which I'm familiar. I'll definitely pick this back up when I have more time

so here's my stuff. You don't have to read all of the chapters, I didn't read all of yours, so you can just go over the first chapter.

The_Chosen_Z 2025-04-28 02:27:47 UTC #18

ShadowNova2024 2025-04-28 03:53:51 UTC #19

thank you for the feedback and I am aware of the errors but have only recently had the time to proofread and begin to edit my work as well as create cover art the current cover is not a finished product nor is the book as I have just finished chapter 7 I am currently only able to commit a few hours a day to working on this as a personal project while attending college and working full time and plan to upload updated versions of each chapter once I have the time to put more focus on this

Agnivrat03 2025-04-28 06:00:08 UTC #20

Hello NgChloe, Thanks for the lovely review. I've chosen the character's name based on different things. Some character names were based on their personality, kind of power they possess while other's have my friend's name.
I also read your novel and just by reading the first chapter i instantly realised you put a lot of efforts into the world building and characters. The description of character was almost perfect, not too much to overwhelm the readers and not too less that they won't be able to imagine. If I'm correct, I think there is some conflicts going on between two powers. And there is also some ancient character that possesses peoples and made them go berserk. So the concept is well written but if i"ve to suggest any improvement then it should be that there are many diificult words for the organizations or power you introduced in the first chapter like Disaster Beast so it should be better if you introduce new things slowly so the readers can remember it for the longer duration. Since you are only uploading a single chapter weekly there are gonna be many readers who will forget these terms after a week.