Drop the link! let's review each other's work

LiW 2025-04-28 09:06:32 UTC #21

Sure, here's mine. Just started but...

Soren_Frost 2025-04-28 11:13:38 UTC #22

Here is mine!

adamjtitus1 2025-04-28 11:45:55 UTC #23

Agnivrat03 2025-04-28 13:48:41 UTC #24

Hello kyanbu. I read your comic and your drawing skillss are good. The character design you drew were also fire. That's why I have to be even more harsher with you. First let's start with dialogues. The dialogues are very stiff and emotionless and in some places they were very hard to read as well. The second is fighting scene. They were so confusing and the pacing was so abrupt that i didn't even understand in half of the chapter what was happening. The third was the way you made panel. I don't have words how to describe that. I couldn't even understand which panel was next. Hope you have worked on these things in the latest chapters
And here is my novel, all the suggestions, compliment and critics are welcomed!

enderarjun 2025-04-28 14:03:07 UTC #25

Only 5 chapter released

Agnivrat03 2025-04-28 15:52:34 UTC #26

Okay I read both your novel and comic. There isn't much to talk about novel since there is only one chapter out. I can't comment on your world since i don't know anything about that but I can still give a review about your writing style. It's good! You are using very easy english words so most of the readers can easily understand what you're trying to say. The flow and pacing was also well and the depiction was also fine. It would've been better if you had given a little info about how the main character actually looked like but since it's just a first chapter and a prologue as well so its fine.
As for your comic, the first panel was one hack of a long panel, and readers really like panels like these, your art style is also good and your mc is blind and can see the colours of the soul of people which is also a nice starting but there is one thing. The girl he met only shared a single sentence with him and he already fell head over heels for her. I understand that your mc is never loved before but falling for a girl over just one sentence is like forcing them into relationship. So to make their relation more impactful you can make it that they spent some time together which would make mc's struggle to find her even more real and genuine. Here is the link of my novel, all the suggestions and compliments are welcomed!
https://tapas.io/series/Child-of-prophecy/info

Phoenix_fly 2025-04-28 15:53:53 UTC #27

The_Chosen_Z 2025-04-28 21:24:59 UTC #28

Agnivrat03 2025-04-29 06:05:15 UTC #29

Hello Soren_frost I read your novel. When I read the starting, I thought it was just an another cliche novel where mc is about to die and will be reincarnated to get her revenge. But as I read further I realised it's entirely different. Your story is very interesting and the depiction is also good. The writing wasn't immature at all. You have nice story telling skills and your novel has nice starting and I'm sure if you keep going like this, you are gonna make it big

Shax.Writes 2025-04-29 08:28:59 UTC #30

skullforceagents 2025-04-29 11:17:10 UTC #31

You’re welcome to take a look at mine

skullforceagents 2025-04-29 11:42:24 UTC #32

Hi there! I took a look at Time’s Missing. Great stuff! Your pacing is very strong and it complements the theme of the story very well. I subscribed because I really like the story and want to see where it goes.

Since you’re working digitally, I’d recommend checking out magic poser. It’s helped me tremendously with setting up my scenes and making dynamic poses with my characters. Not that there’s anything wrong with what you’re doing, but I think it could be even stronger with more variations of the “camera angles” if you will. No need to go back and redo anything, just something to keep in mind as you grow this lovely story.

Great work!!

Soren_Frost 2025-04-29 13:39:32 UTC #33

Thanks a lot for your sincere review!

Agnivrat03 2025-04-29 14:15:31 UTC #34

Hey @adamjtitus1 I read your comic. Your art style is fine, but you can make it more detailed. In some panel, characters faces were unrecognizable. The story seemed to be interesting. its about two boys looking for their missing mother in dangerous outside world. But its been almost an year since you last uploaded. Have you dropped it? if yes then there is no point for this review and if not then you should upload regularly if you really wanna become successful in this field.

NGChloe 2025-04-29 14:24:31 UTC #35

thank you for the feedback. I will try to add more notes so as not to confuse people. I was trying to not be too explain-y, but I must've gone too far in a lot of places

Kyanbu 2025-04-30 03:29:55 UTC #36

Thanks for the feedback! I was able to work on improving those things after Chapter 1. Readability and page layouts being fixed almost completely by chapter 2. I'm currently reading your web novel. I'll review your first 5 chapters, within a few days once I'm done reading and collecting my thoughts on the story so far.

Branking 2025-04-30 03:44:54 UTC #37

The Voidbound Goddess Who Took a Mortal Boy

Twelve-year-old Kevin witnessed a stunning, otherworldly goddess who came to retrieve his brother’s soul. Despite his fear of her overwhelming power, he crossed the rift by grabbing his brother’s feet — and was dragged into the World of Ever-After.
Lady Seraphina, guardian of Ever-After, realized too late that she had accidentally kidnapped a mortal!
Now, catastrophic consequences are in motion.
His brother’s sacrifice.
The vengeance of the "Red Smoke."
The wailing of the Seven-Headed Mother.
Beyond the Void lurk the corrupted Divine Entities...
What can a mere boy do when faced with challenges beyond mortal comprehension?

Agnivrat03 2025-04-30 07:47:29 UTC #38

hey @enderarjun. I read first 2 chapters of your novel. It was a huge no for me as soon as i realized its a system novel because I've read a lot and lot of them but still without letting my personal feelings in the way- I tried to read it to give you an honest review being unbiased. Your writing skills is fine-can be improved further- but for a newbie author its quiet good. Your main character has the exact same ability of teleportation as Minato and since he is my fav character of Naruto series- It was good-reading some character actually having same abilities like him. I think people who like system novel will enjoy reading it

TheOnsetOfNight 2025-05-03 02:53:10 UTC #39

New chapter

jaeho 2025-05-03 02:55:23 UTC #40

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