Hello there, HostileFren, I have read as far as possible to get a proper review. Here are my thoughts on this novel:
First off, great transition from the 'real life' to the 'fantasy' part. At first, I didn't feel the fantasy vibes, but it was a sudden but gradual shift! I suppose she got into an accident and woke up in the middle of a road? It was a perfect transition. After that, the vibes of the novel changed as well!! That is sometimes hard to achieve but you did it seamlessly.
However, I wish you would've done something different with the 'info dump'. You incorporated it into the dialogue itself which is not necessarily bad, but it would've been nice to have that sense of mystery by keeping it hidden!
Overall, nice novel. The first chapter isn't as well-edited as the others, but I do find it pleasant to read the rest through!
8.1/10