Feedback/critique on my comic ideas

[inf1565]

1. Girl school clique meets schoolmate inventor(a loner)
2. MMORPG player is loner, loser then plays a women's char and it comes to the turnaround. He also transforms into a hot woman in real life.

Just write me your comments please. Thanks for reading.

[HGohwell]

There's not much to go on on either. 1 is a vague concept with no hint as to what sort of plot there would be and 2 feels like a take on a standard isekai but without anything more there's nothing to go on there either. I mean, they're ideas? That's about all you can say. Some more detail would be helpful. It'd be like describing Jurrassic Park as "my idea is a dinosaur theme park" cool, but some details would be helpful to understand what you're actually going to do.

[Katzalcoatl]

Like @HGohwell mentioned you don't give use lots to work with. I have no idea what your story is about. You just presented a super vague idea.

What's your summary? What makes your story unique?

You pretty much told us something similar to "My story is about a boy who meets a girl and they fall in love". I mean that is pretty much every romance novel so there's no critique that can be added.

Just tell us more about both ideas and what makes them unique. A brief summary of each one will help us help you.

You also forgot to mention the genre of each idea. I am assuming the first one will be like a typical romance comedy and the second one will be fantasy/sci-fi. But both ideas could be executed as horror, drama or something else that would make them unique.

P.S. Both ideas are good since they are proven formulas but we do need more details to know if it is different from what has already been done.

[dbeirigo]

maybe the mmorpg player is trans but didn't realize until the transformation.

[HGohwell]

So, just to demonstrate and be a bit reassuring, like I know lots of newer people worry about putting their ideas out there because they might be stolen or judged or spoil things. So a version from my drafts that I'm considering polishing up, in the way you did it would be:

Boy meets fae.

Could be anything. There's not much to critique or feedback on. Comparatively, the more you give the more there is to be looked at and critiqued. The most you can say for the above is that it's sounds like a pretty standard, if reversed, paranormal romance. So you want to try and describe what's unique and give and idea what the core plot actually is rather than just an idea. For example:

Rococo inspired fantasy drama romance.
Con-man is recruited by his old partner in crime for a plot to swindle a noble family. Except the noble maiden they're targeting is a fake, and is in fact a half-fae black widow with her eyes on a wealthy merchant's son, and they have history.

Now, I've got a lot more of the plot than that planned out, but I'll stop there because even if you only have the bare bones of a plot like that above, and don't have all the twists and turns planned out, it's at least more for people critiquing to get their teeth into and understand what you're aiming for. But as a general rule: the more you give, the more people can give you advice, feedback and critique.