Yeah, I'm looking at it on a browser and for some reason the page disabled the scroll bar (at least on firefox). I can still scroll if I use my tablet but uh, that's kind of odd. I wonder what happened there.
anyway, I adore Persuasion, and like you, I took a class in college, where paper at the end of the semester was on Persuasion, too. Fun idea to turn it into a comic, so I was interested in seeing what you had there just from the title alone.
Vertical scroll comics like pacing their script and panels out like you've done here, so that's nice--and I like how you used text bubbles in the second one to show her thoughts vs text just hanging out in the void (although it doesn't need to be that fancy. With text bubbles simpler is usually the best option since legibility is the most important thing for a story comic). But, you want to avoid using multiple fonts as much as possible, unless the story needs it. So I like the font you use most of the time, but it changed once and it was very obvious. Makes it look like someone else is talking.
I think you need to have more panels to fill out that dialogue, though. Once he starts talking, it cuts away to some filler images, and it would be better to see him acting. Since we can't hear him speak, and since there's no narrative text, the only way a reader will know how he is speaking if we can see what's happening--is he mad? Ambivalent? Happy? that type of thing. Those expressions give the dialogue more life.
Also, I don't know how you're gonna pace out your comic and much you'd like to draw or what is required for your assignment--but you can take more panels to introduce the magnificence of Kyllench and the vain mannerisms of Sir Elliot and how it contrasts with Anne's (because right now we don't know much about what Anne is like). A lot of Webtoon episodes are long. Some are even 30+ panels an episode (though that is not required), so you can flesh it out more, so we feel more like we're there. Right now we have the bare-bones of what happened, and it's being told to us instead of us getting to watch it happen, if that makes sense.
But, I think you have a good start and a good instinct for what you want it to be, despite not being an illustrator. Like, you've clearly drawn before. As for the technique and the anatomy, I think it helps to look at reference. So take a selfie in the pose you're doing and that helps a ton when translating it to the screen. Everyone's style of drawing is different, so how I'd draw them is not necessarily how it would jive for you, but here's my five cents on how to draw an angry old man (I have no idea which scene was the one you were worried about, so I'm gonna take a guess and say...maybe Sir Elliot's angry face?)
First off, with illustration you have to exaggerate your expression about 150%. As you color in your drawing and polish it, you will loose a lot of expression naturally in each pass, so just always go more ham, and then, in the end it will look normal. So instead of just giving Sir Elliot angry eyes--give him an angry pose. Think about his whole body. Think in broad terms, and then sketch out what you think is going on...like this
This is the thumbnail phase where we don't care about details, but we care more about gesture. Like you want to think of how you would stage an actor, but mid-movement. I put those arrows in to show the overall gestures of the character--that it's the whole figure moving, and not just the eyes or the mouth. And then, take a selfie of yourself in that weird position to see what is actually going on -- and then exaggerate it somewhat. Like I'm not an old man but a young woman but hey, the proportions are similar enough to fit (forgive the clothes, I'm leaving those a sketch but you get the idea)
And like I've been drawing many, many years so it's easier said than done, but looking at cartoons in the style you want, and seeing how they do different expressions can give you ideas of how you would do it for your own comic.
Really though, I think the way you're doing it is fine for a thesis, and honestly fine for a lot of stuff on Webtoons, you just need more panels of it.
As for backgrounds--they just take a really long time. Luckily, you can opt out of having a background in every panel, and so you only need a background like once a page -- and for vertical scrolling episodes you only need a background when...you need it. When it starts feeling empty, basically. You can instead just have a gradient hanging out behind your characters with a subtle texture, you don't have to draw Kyllench every scene.
