Feedback on my blurb?

[AshanaArt]

I’ve finished writing the scene by scene outline of the first season/book of my comic, and I’m close to finishing the first chapter. I don’t plan on posting it until I finish the prologue and first two chapters though, but I wanted to start thinking about the blurb.

For context it’s a High fantasy story featuring four main characters, who all have their own motives for working together to pull off a heist. It’s a very character driven story featuring morally grey characters, and the plot is built off of their choices. It focuses on themes of loyalty, betrayal, sacrifice, and change.

The worldbuilding and environments are all very fantastical, and magic does play a large role in the story (3/4 of the main cast has powers of some sort, and none of them are humans since they all have horns/wings/antennae’s/etc) 2 of them are Zyborn, meaning they are born with powers, and one of them is a mage, and I focus on having them use their cunning and unique skill sets to get out of situations and not just becoming more powerful. Plot wise most of the story is spent traveling, and the actual heist occurs towards the end of the first book.

I’m not sure if the blurb conveys what I want it to so I’d love any feedback!

Blurb:

Nyx, a cunning and ruthless theif, with the rare ability to shapeshift, taking on countless forms and names to serve her goals.

Azari, a princess turned fugitive, willing to do anything in order to bring justice and reclaim her rightful place as queen.

Ghost, a budding mage, desperate to prove himself so he can return home.

Zea, A curious young girl who wishes only to bring light to the people around her, hides a deadly gift.

Despite their conflicting motives, the unlikely team of outcasts is united by a single goal- to steal an ancient super weapon with the potential to end the war. But before they can even attempt the seemingly impossible heist, they’ll have to travel together through mountains and mysteries woods, facing dangerous creatures and people alike, but together, they may have a chance to pull it off- if they don’t end each other first.

[barewatbard]

The story sounds engaging, and there's just enough information to pique my interest in finding out what happens. But for constructive feedback, usually blurbs are shorter because of reader attention span. I would maybe make the character descriptions a bit more concise and to go for a more show-don't-tell. Avoid repetition of ideas.

For example you could simply say "Nyx, a ruthless thief and a skilled shapeshifter. " You already have the words "ruthless" and "shapeshifter" so it's maybe a bit unnecessary to also say "taking on countless forms and names to serve her goals." It's already implied. The description of Ghost is better at being short and sweet. The others are OK, but could also be shorter: e.g. "Zea, a girl who wants to help others but who hides a deadly gift." (the "people around her" is not bad, but makes the sentence longer).

Coincidentally, my webcomic Barewa the Bard is also a fantasy story about a group of four people travelling together, one of whom is named Nyx (a mischievous but easily distracted fae).

Anyway, as for the description: check it for some typos, maybe split up the last sentence, but otherwise it's good. If you want to make it more concise, too, here's my suggested edit (up to you if you want to use it):
"This unlikely team of outcasts is faced by a seemingly impossible mission - to steal an ancient super weapon with the potential to end the war. But first, they’ll have to travel together through mountains and mysteries woods, facing dangerous creatures and people alike. Together, they may have a chance to pull it off - if they don’t finish off each other first."

Hope that makes sense, sorry for going teacher mode! Overall, it's good stuff.