Feedback on my series so far, Please

Jwebtoons 2025-11-22 01:53:31 UTC #1

Few things I would like to know.

Thoughts on the characters.

Thoughts on the story, pacing and character development.

Thoughts on the concepts and magic system.

If anything is confusing.

Are the fights good?

animamundisoulworld 2025-11-22 04:13:40 UTC #2

It feel like it was made more for a Manga page set up then a webtoon so the panels felt more odd being so close together in the beginning. I was worried of the trope of them getting power boosts from being a vessel so soon would of made fighting opponents' trivial but you setup opponent's of equal power not too early or too late. I think the magic system is fine, perhaps sigils of greater power to require special materials instead of normal paints or inks. All in all I think its moving forward pretty well, but perhaps leave more spacing between the panels the action can feel a bit cluttered at points. The fights are creative so that's going great for you as well. The characters are developing well . Keep going :3

There's my Prologue and some character concepts if you want to give your opinion's too ( I'm a long ways before releasing anything though lol )

Krysteena 2025-11-25 06:23:20 UTC #3

Would you be willing to do a chapter per chapter exchange?

Main Novel

LivvyLeopard 2025-11-25 22:39:31 UTC #4

I’ve liked subbed and commented on your story. Will you be willing to do the same for mine. I’ll continue to like and sub your chapters if you do the same for mine

Synopsis: For generations, the world has been protected from the evil monsters and beings of darkness by a mysterious guild of heroes called the Celestial Guardians. People gifted with the powers of animal constellations. They have the ability to transform into their specific animal, as well as possess amazing powers of their own.

Every generation, twelve special beings are chosen to inherit these abilities for the greater good. But for this current generation of chosen ones, a brand new guardian is selected to join them. Will she be able rise up and become a brave guardian?

This story follows Sakura, as she and her newfound friends work together to defeat evil as the Shining Celestial Guardians.