Alright here we go
- The first thing I noticed is that the characters and backgrounds are near impossible to distinguish at times. They share the same lineweight and color saturation.
To address this, I have two possible solutions:
- Make the background elements have a smaller brush: this will make the characters pop out more
- use a thicker brush for the outlines of the characters: this will also make them pop
The panelling is random at times, sometimes you space out the panels and sometimes you cran them together so you can barely see where one panel starts and where it ends. I would recommend to space them out more. Leave some gutter space between them and it will be more clear that way.
on that note, I would also make the panels wider because right now there is often no space for speech bubbles. I think you have noticed that as well. And it's something I'm guilty of in my work as well so I understand. I do suggest to try and keep it in mind when drawing panels. If you leave 1/3 of the panel more empty for speech bubbles it shouldn't feel so cramped.
Lastly, the characters barely avoid same face syndrome if only because you give them different noses or other features. They all have the same head shape and face layout. I bet that if you would draw all of them lined up and turn everything black they would all nearly have an identical silhouette, making it hard to tell them apart.
I would suggest experimenting with some shapes, maybe have a character with a round head and another with a more long rectangular face? I think there is opportunity to create some interesting silhouettes there.
