Honest critiques

DualDragons 2023-06-23 13:13:07 UTC #1

I'm in the mood to read and give some critiques, and I also have time now that the mobile game I was playing erased my save data.

How it works: if you drop your links here I'll give it a read and then give a critique. But not just any critique, a brutally honest critique where I do not hold back. I will be civil but I will not sugarcoat anything. If I think you need to improve your art I will say so. If you are using inferior software like paint I will tell you to install medibang. If your speech bubbles are bad I will say get good. I will rip your work to shreds (ok not literally)

But if I am too harsh imo I will do a little sketch of your character to make it up to you. So don't be too afraid

I will only do comics and I can ghost this thread anytime I want

Headypigeon4180 2023-06-23 13:17:58 UTC #2

Alright let's do this

Stargazer31 2023-06-23 13:32:03 UTC #3

Let's go!

IndigoShirtProd 2023-06-23 13:35:46 UTC #4

If it's alright with you, can you just give some feedback on my latest chapter, Chapter 5. If not, that's okay.

abigaillmartin 2023-06-23 13:36:43 UTC #5

Ahh. Okay. Critique away!

moontokkym 2023-06-23 13:50:20 UTC #6

Posting is going on break in July so you can take your time to check out my comic ^^ for now there's only a breezy 49 pages up so it shouldn't take too long to read. I hope you like dystopias (well... as much as anyone can "like" a dystopia).

Wirdhere 2023-06-23 14:00:47 UTC #7

Still hella early on but I'd Love some Critiques . A slice of Life series about monsters living on an island

DualDragons 2023-06-23 14:06:25 UTC #8

If you don't mind I will only critique one of them, not both

SirCoockie 2023-06-23 14:52:44 UTC #9

Okay (but not just the Prologue if you can)

DualDragons 2023-06-23 15:30:13 UTC #10

Alright, I will be honest: everything in your comic is pretty subpar and needs a lot of work in my opinion.

The panelling has a top-down flow which, while it does flow correctly from panel to panel, it does no favours in catching my attention
Backgrounds do give a sense of where we are, but that's all they do. They do barely provide a sense of depth if at all and do not look pleasant to the eye.
For an action comic there are not a lot of dynamic angles. In fact I really only see front and side angles.
The anatomy could use some practice
Artwork is rather inconsistent with the lines

I think I'll recommend you to study disney comics, specifically Donald Duck (since your protagonists are somewhat similar in that they are also bird like, and I think Donald Duck is a nice example of how they handle expressive faces for their duck and bird like characters). On top of that they usually have some nice dynamic shots and the backgrounds have enough depth to distinguish the characters from it.

Have an example I found online!

abigaillmartin 2023-06-23 15:39:52 UTC #11

Alright do Cracking Eggs since the first book is done and the second one is almost done

DualDragons 2023-06-23 15:58:27 UTC #12

Honestly not a lot to remark on, you have a lot of polish and skill. Everything looks clean and very solid, love it.

My only critique would be that the action scenes have little impact, no oomph. Like for examplewhen the boulders are thrown against the wolf it does not really feel impactful imo, it moreso looks like he is having a itch rather than being hurt.
(Unless he is so strong that boulders don't dent him, in that case I said nothing)

(@Stargazer31 don't worry I haven't forgotten you it's just that typing this review was faster)

IndigoShirtProd 2023-06-23 16:04:50 UTC #13

Oh thanks! Yea, that scene was less about inflicting damage and more about pushing him back.

delladz 2023-06-23 16:27:16 UTC #14

I feel like you've done critique of my work before, but idr so feel free to either skip mine or take a look at later chapters?

Headypigeon4180 2023-06-23 16:47:41 UTC #15

Yeah... it's getting remastered for good reason xD. I just finished fixing another page today...

cherrystark 2023-06-23 16:54:48 UTC #16

I'm game, but no pressure.

sefra114 2023-06-23 17:24:06 UTC #17

I'm always up for a critique- I'd love to hear what I can improve upon! If you have the time to check this comic of mine and let me know what you think, I would greatly appreciate it! Thanks!

Chocolate 2023-06-23 17:38:37 UTC #18

Lmaooooooo I’m ready! Please be as honest and brutal as you like: https://m.webtoons.com/en/challenge/larvae/list?title_no=216355

llobucervallince 2023-06-23 19:35:21 UTC #19

so far I know that the biggest problem is the narrative but I feel that the next few episodes (that I'm currently writing) will help develope the whole volume

Headypigeon4180 2023-06-23 21:36:27 UTC #20

@DualDragons just quickly how far into my comic did you get?