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Dec 2020

I just finished posting chapter two of my comic. I've been working on it for about 2 years now! I do have some specific questions for readers of chapter two so that hopefully, I can go back and correct things at a later stage. My main questions are these:

  1. during the flashblack scenes, it is clear that what is being shown is reality while hugh is telling a fictionalized version? otherwise how can i make that more clear? is there another way to show that hugh is essentially censoring the story for a kid without censoring it for the readers? would it help if i redacted the swear words with black bars?

  2. what are your first impressions of the female character in demin?

  3. what are your feelings about the relationship between hugh and zauna?

Please feel free to be as detailed as possible. I'd really appreciate criticism, however harsh!

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1-that wasn't really clear to me. Maybe by adding some narration where hugh pauses and gives a more family friendly description may work better.....

This is a funny example of the narrator censoring things while making it clear for viewers the topic was not as innocent.....

2-She is really cool, love the character and would love to see more of her (or at least know what happened to her) :grin:

3-I really like their dynamic. Hugh makes an entertaining foil to Zauna's dad when it comes to life advice.
While Hugh sometimes comes off as the fun but irresponsible uncle, one can tell he really cares.

Hope this helps and looking up for what comes next!