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Jan 19

I would like a review for a review! Let me know about how you feel about the themes and characters and development inside of the story. The pacing the dialogue. Let me know about how you felt about all of it.

You can check out my webnovel here.

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Read the first three chapters. I like it. Your writing is very easy to read, I think it's fitting for the tone/characters you established, and makes for an enjoyable story. The parallels between the dragon/human/wolfs backstories is solid, all outcasts/abused, and finding solace between their love for each other. I hope the later chapters do more to show the similarities/differences between them. I could've used a little more/clearer description of the size differences between these races, maybe even some differences in dialect between them. The dragon's dialogue at the start, the cursing/casualness, turned me off, but it wasn't terrible, and I liked him more when we get to his exchanges/treatment toward his son.

Dude this feedback was so solid. Thank you so much, I'll definitely read your story and let you know what I think.

@justincarbunkle I think that the premise and base of your story is super interesting. You got an entertaining foundation of characters stuck in 10th grade and being aware that they never age. I think that you could really benefit from having a prologue explaining that would help a lot. But the characters look interesting and the joke about the students wanting to have fun under the guise of political criticism got a laugh out of me.

Overall I think it serves as a comic that's fun to read. That's my review.