I think it is much better than before.
I went through the last few chapters that I didn't get to read before and I have to say, they are good, but the dialogue leaves me wanting more on some parts. For example in chapter six when Justin comes back, Jack asked Eamon 'who is that?' and Eamon answers, 'do you know him?' It kind of pulled me back to reality. Also, because your descriptions are so good, I think that you rely on them too much in between dialogue. For example, I noticed that you explain Eamon's expression twice within the span of a page on chapter six. It's okay to let the dialogue stand on it's own.
Lastly, I noticed that in chapter six Justin appears, then in the next chapter Jack starts talking about Justin as if they didn't have that encounter in chapter six and it's a little confusing.
Otherwise you are doing an excellent job, and I'm really jealous of how good your descriptions are. If you are interested in reviewing my work I would appreciate it.
