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Aug 2021
  1. My first suggestion would be that you should change your cover, as it doesn't give anything about the story. You should try putting some characters at least your main character and your city in the background.
  2. Again gangs and stuff always attract me and your storytelling is amazing, I was hooked by the mono itself. And you have art for creating suspense and curiosity. I mean now I wanna know what the main character is going to do now.
  3. The things that didn't stand out were (i) short chapters (ii) some confusing lines.
  4. overall it was a good chapter but it should have been long. It's a solid 7/10 for me.
    5.Thank you. I hope I wasn't too harsh.

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*Technically, the first chapter (Lament) is pretty short. You might want to read it plus the one after that (Street Life) to get a more well-rounded impression.

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Title:Your Smile

Author: Neurel

Genre: yaoi, drama,romance, comedy
Description:
One morning before Su Baek-Yang left for work as always, his so-called neighbor/co-worker started to bother him. The handsome man seems to be itching to get on his nerves on a daily basis. Why won't this annoying mosquito leave him alone?!
Status: Ongoing