I will review the first episode of the works you put down here

[JoshRaid]

The cut-off speech bubbles were a stylistic choice to show that he's aware of her words but not listening. I probably should fix that since it's so poorly conveyed. You're the third person I've had to explain it to.

I think the plot confusion is caused by a big mistake I made when writing. I originally had a narration monologue from Otaka explain the plot at the start but I decided that was cliche because a random youtube video advised against this type of thing. I'm dumb.

The narration went like this if it helps:

"For generations, the chosen one and the dark lord were chosen by destiny and fought for the fate of the world.
But one day, a new dark lord came into power, but the chosen one never came, so the dark lord conquered all, bringing ruin and rot wherever he went. And everyone just let him, believing that a hero would come. But I know the truth. He isn't coming.

I will stop the dark lord myself.

I have a long-distance friendship with Heiroe and Superblonde Valiant. I'm traveling with them. At least I will be when we meet up."

Does this help?

[sc101]

If comics are fine, can you do mine?

Rotten Apples | Tapas

[sevenstarsofeightIam]

For example, can you tell me how to imagine this sentence?

For me, I'm interpreting it as Zamani the MC stands on a rodent on top of a tall creature called a nhola facing the city of castles named Zhereen (I'm assuming the city is built by humans and thus uses the human standard of how large a city should be).

Thank you, Sorin_Gran.

You make a good point. Actually, the nhola forest is comprised of very tall tree-like mushrooms called nholas. The voal is the flat spongy top of the nhola, at the center of which is a depression in which the dew rises once each day. This all comes out in the reading, but you are right. The inclination toward instant gratification hangs like an albatross from the necks of the average reader. I should not give them so much credit for creative interaction.

[arbiterswake]

Thanks for this thread. If you could also review the first episode of Arbiter's Wake, I'd really appreciate it.

Arbiter's Wake | Tapas

[emmaemeh2011]

Invitation To the Bus of Love

here's mine , if you're okay with comics too
and thank you for this thread

[MK_Wizard]

Thanks for the input. It is appreciated a lot and I will take it into account.

[writeryoanroturier]

Hey! Sure I'll review your first episode.

Here's a link to my novel:

Death before the Beginning | Tapas

[Iridium]

Greetings! I'll make my best to read your novel as soon as I can! If you want to give it a try, I'll leave Menmar here for your appreciation:

Menmar (EN) | Tapas

Menmar (PTBR) | Tapas

[sorin_gran]

I took a look at your comic, now I want someone to answer a question I kept on having. Why one page per episode? Is it difficult to merge multiple pages together? The art is flat and simplistic so it may resonate with the people who like that art-style. However, I'm not a fan of the dialogue and the one-dimensional character writing. I looked at one of your later chapters and your art definitely improved and the writing is more tolerable. I'm glad to know that you have grown quite a bit since you started.

Overall Opinions:

• Noticeable improvement in your later works (That's what growing as a creator is truly about)
• Simplistic art style that appeals to certain audiences

-- The writing leaves a lot to be desired.
-- Strange text bubble design and colour choices (Why yellow fill?)

Thank you for participating and good luck on your creative journey!

[ruqi]

Hello, good day. Thank you for the opportunity to share. I love this thread. I will definitely check your work out as well.

I have noticed a trend of many views on my first episode and not many after that. I haven't received any comments or reviews before, so I don't know where the problems may lie. I would be grateful if you check out my new novel. All feedback is welcome. Hope you enjoy it regardless!

Ice and Ichor | Tapas

[mountainwolves]

I would greatly appreciate it!

The Raven and The Skull

[Lemon_Demon]

Here’s mine! and I will check out urs too, probably comment about urs in ur comment section.
So my prologue is too short, u might wanna review prologue + chapter 1, otherwise u can just do prologue.

Dianchian | Tapas

[djourner]

I have read your story and I have to say, from the chapters I read it was interesting, it has a nice hook of a kid dealing with a supernatural entity that seems to want to just mess with him (or at least so far that is).
I like the way he and the old man casually chat, i live for those slice of lifeish moments in any story.

Journey to Ataraxia | Tapas

Here is JTA in case you're interested in reviewing ^^
Also, technically the 'first chapter' is the first four Acts in the story... I originally did not write for Tapas so i had to cut my script in acts to acommodate for the character limit. But I'd say if you can make it to the end of act one that's perfectly valid.
I will understand if you don't stick with it, as it's not everyone's cup of tea... But hey, maybe you end up liking it. ^^

Also... fair warning as later episodes have mature scenes, But that is only if you stick with it for that long... And it's not so violent or naughty that it might cause a severe reaction.

[Veena]

Super slow-paced BL... hasn't even really reached the BL part lol

Borderline Candidate | Tapas

[TheOddFungi]

Here is mine I would really like feedback for
I will check yours out as well!

Genre: romance, fantasy, drama

Red Dragon Part 1: Broken | Tapas

[sorin_gran]

I believe that you genuinely have a worthwhile story to tell but the dialogue does not do it justice. I think there is some charm that can be found in your artwork even though I find the line art to be a bit too rigid and messy and the colouring to be flat. However, I love seeing that your art and your writing has grown when looking at one of your later chapters. Your growth as a creator is worth more than any accolades some website has given you. Ultimately, you are heading in the right direction, just keep learning from your mistake and grow your craft.

Overall Opinions:
+ Growth as a creator is noticeable
+ Art has its charm
+ Story has potential

-- Speech bubbles are weirdly designed.
-- Some text is off-center
-- Garish green speech bubbles. rip night mode readers.
-- Cringeworthy dialogue

Damn, I did not expect my post to grow this much. I will do some more tomorrow and thank you for participating! I wish you the best of luck in your creative journey.

[antonioIII]

Oh, thanks mate!
Yeah, art, bubbles and dialogues was extremely messy. XD
I am really glad that you took some time to review my comic. ^^
Again, thank you!

[Tinkerton]

Hello, here's mine if you ever have time. Thank you! 🖤

Tragic | Tapas

[samiluu]

Black Wings | Tapas

[kevinlimiti]

Hi, I read your first episode and I liked it enough to subscribe. It was well paced although there were a few grammatical errors that were a bit disconcerting. Here's mine. Feel free to tear it apart!

Warfare: Online | Tapas