I will review the first episode of the works you put down here

sorin_gran 2021-03-21 13:58:36 UTC #73

I hope you would be willing to enlighten me. Besides the time it takes to draw the art. Is there other reasons one would do one page per episode? I'm asking because whether you like it or not. In this platform, you are competing against many accomplished works that consistently provides 20+ pages per week. Even for the readers who want to find those under-the-radar works, the one page per episode format may throw them off.

Anyways, im just going to assume that is out of your control and ill just talk about the content of your work instead. Personally speaking, im not a big fan of the green coloring. Id much prefer if it was just black instead. Your panel flow is adequate and I never got lost following the action. Your writing is juvenile but then again it is intentional so... eh. The only thing I can say for sure is that I'm definitely not part of the target audience. As a kid, I could imagine myself watching this animated but not in comic form.

Overall Opinions:

Dialogue is tolerable
Artstyle has charm and may feel nostalgic for some

-- No hook (1 page per ep doesnt help)
-- Coloring in green does not work for me

Sorry if im being too harsh. It happens when I'm just not the target audience. Dont get discouraged. Just keep persisting and you'll gather a following that likes your work for what it is. Thank you for participating and best of luck on your creative journey.

Aleksei 2021-03-21 14:08:10 UTC #74

Hi! I Have some subscriptors and likes, but I think that I need some critic just to have more opinions about my work. Be harsh, but fair!

Lahin 2021-03-21 14:35:53 UTC #75

I haven't gotten it reviewed before...

If you'd like to, here is my work.

FafasMcMelt 2021-03-21 16:07:16 UTC #76

thanks a bunch for the feedback my friend, I'll keep it in mind!

sorin_gran 2021-03-23 17:55:50 UTC #77

I have to be honest. Halfway through the first chapter, I basically forgot I was reading this to review it. I just started having fun! I don't believe that novels and comics are about artistic and literary perfection. As long as the readers are having fun, that's enough for me. Your art was nice to look at. Even though it looked a bit amateurish, it added to the charm for me. You set a nice pace. When I finish a chapter, I'm inclined to view your next one. I subscribed, you earned it.

Overall Opinions:
+ Good Art
+ Good Writing
+ Fun to Read

-- Generic but I don't care
-- Looks Amateurish but you'll improve over time.

I look forward to the development of your story. Thank you for participating and best of luck on your creative journey.

summermcallen 2021-03-24 09:31:43 UTC #78

thank you so much
with the Amateurish point: yeah I'm not the best artist by now, but I will get better with time. Before my webtoon I just draw girls and no complex backgrounds. So I never even tried to draw boys before. Even now it's pretty hard for my to draw them, but I get more comfortable with it by now. In the newer chapters the art looks a lot better I also worked hard on my backgrounds. The first chapter s looks a bit amateurisher because these are reuploads + some changes

bulletcrucifixion 2021-03-24 09:34:09 UTC #79

https://tapas.io/series/Sniflheim-civil-war

micch 2021-03-24 12:12:28 UTC #80

oh, great. This is my first episode. The prologe.

https://tapas.io/episode/2072513

Lunar-Turtle 2021-03-26 18:54:50 UTC #81

Thank you so much for the feedback!

And also sorry for such a late reply. I saw the notification but had to go to do something and then forgot about it :,)

petto_lizz 2021-03-27 03:42:31 UTC #82

Hope you like it

bulletcrucifixion 2021-03-27 18:52:05 UTC #84

By all means :

mnheller87 2021-04-04 23:11:40 UTC #85

Hope you're still doing this! Thank you in advance!

jamelin 2021-05-03 16:01:25 UTC #86

Thank you
And don't worry about being to harsh.

Regarding the one page: I draw this comic in pages and since I am a hobby-artist more pages will lead to slower updates.
Do you think something like 4 pages once a month works better?

And for the green, I like that the chapters are separated that way but I guess I should really tone it down...

Thanks again^^

taylorotis26 2021-05-03 16:15:34 UTC #87

Come check mine out if you want!

Novamia 2021-05-08 03:32:45 UTC #88

Cool, here's mine - thanks for this opportunity! I'm late to the party so it's ok if you can't get to it

IzzyStarr 2021-05-08 03:33:58 UTC #89

I really need the feedback thanks!
A Wand and A Sword: https://tapas.io/episode/2152443

sorin_gran 2021-05-15 17:54:32 UTC #90

Unfortunately, the first page did not pique my interest. However, I read a bit further regardless. I wanted to see how you handled dialogue and get a better understanding of your pacing.

Honestly, I liked your black and white panels better than the colored ones. The shading in the black and white panels looked more atmospheric. In fact, the lighting in the colored panels were quite jarring. Especially the panel where you tried to do rembrandt lighting.

I gotta say, your story really reminds me of Death Stranding. Is that intentional? The whole cross country vibe is what makes me think that way.

Sorry for taking so long to review your work. It seems trying to make reviews off a template is not the most efficient way for me. From now on, I will only write what I want to say and nothing more.

Thank you for participating and I wish you the best of luck in your creative journey!

Stargazer31 2021-05-15 17:56:28 UTC #91

sorin_gran 2021-05-15 18:03:05 UTC #92

I read your story before but I forgot to review it. Very sorry about that. I wanted to reread it so I can refresh my memory but it appears you have deleted it. It's a shame, I thought you had a pretty decent story. What happened that made you give up? I hope you will one day make a return. I hope you have a good life and remember that there will always be people to support you when you are having trouble.

iury9948 2021-05-15 18:05:22 UTC #93

https://tapas.io/series/SUBSTANTIA2

Genre: Action, Drama, Romance