Loved your description of her! It comes off to a great start, and you can tell she really means business!
I only have suggestions on grammar because you have a few comma splices and run on sentences.
And a few misplaced words like: one sentences says, “Daring but polite, that was her fabulous way to be.” But I think you meant to say “Daring but polite, that was her favorite way to be.”
You have a few commas that could be turned into periods and some that don’t need to be there because it interrupts the flow. Overall, I really liked her personality and the story is compelling, and I’m invested. I loved the vocabulary you use like bijouterie instead of jewelry! Raven is sassy and a little crazy lol
You have episode 2 and 3 called part III twice but they’re different!