I'll read your comics based on their impressions on me

BarBarKetrab 2021-06-14 09:27:11 UTC #4

Yaaaay!! More feedback!!

Thanks for the opportunity. I'm actually working on the same problem now, so if I can get some feedback on how I handle my introductions, I'll be grateful.
Be as brutally honest as you see fit!

IamKeeks 2021-06-14 09:37:03 UTC #5

I'm hoping the description speaks for itself.

Kirieslawa 2021-06-14 10:11:08 UTC #6

It's good to make a research before start own story. It's always hard but I think it worth it, so good luck!

here's my story:

DualDragons 2021-06-14 10:23:29 UTC #7

So while I started, I was rather confused at the beginning (I presumed there was some kind of monster in the pine tree forest). I was also wondering how this would tie in to the protagonist, since the blurb mentions a traumatic encounter. Unfortunately, the sequence after the forest scene was just slow to me, with a lot of talking. And well, the monologue made me lose interest, sorry

I do like the way the protagonist copes with his trauma and tells himself that he'll never do something again to get through the day. I think that was a nice touch to get to know the mc and learn about a shard of his past without a lot of exposition. It's just a shame that after that the monologue starts.

a.g.meade 2021-06-14 10:30:23 UTC #8

Oh, thank you for the sub! I'm glad that you enjoyed the art style. I also like solid inkwork in comics, so I'm always always striving to make the most of heavier contrast!

DualDragons 2021-06-14 10:31:08 UTC #9

Honestly really solid! I was going into this not having much of a impression due to the thumbnail which is more chibi-ish than the actual art, but the art is surprisingly good, with natural poses and being softer while still being clear enough to read.

The exposition of Mora's backstory is done rather well with it requiring only a few flashbacks to show the conflict between her family and the hunters, and it ties into the ongoing combat rather well. I also like that the beginning immediately drops you into the action but it doesn't feel wrong to me. You got my sub

BarBarKetrab 2021-06-14 10:47:28 UTC #10

Thanks, I'll keep that in mind for future projects.

Bokyongyo 2021-06-14 10:54:08 UTC #11

Feedback to start the day is always good and agree on the hook part. Think some of my favorite stories had something similar to it even if it’s a short little one page prologue thing.

doodleandie 2021-06-14 11:08:57 UTC #12

Here's mine! And you can go all out with the criticism on it, since I don't get a lot of that, and it would be super useful.

DualDragons 2021-06-14 11:13:26 UTC #13

Honestly a really good comic with great art and I like the different setting you choose. The only thing that probably holds me from subbing is that the genres and probably the direction of the story aren't really my cup of tea (which is totally on me and not your fault at all).
I think the opening sequence is natural albeit a little slow for my comfort (again, that's on me and the type of pacing I like )

Kirieslawa 2021-06-14 11:24:43 UTC #14

thank you!
I know this genre isn't for everyone, so don't worry

Bokyongyo 2021-06-14 11:29:05 UTC #15

Hey I checked out your first few episodes and i like that you started the story. Also like how you allow the characters to tell the story through subtle and realistic dialogue without putting too much information; Nothing feels like the writer telling the audience about something it all feels natural. But yeah not all stories will be everyone’s cup of tea but you do have a solid work and nice little fan base looking at your stuff. Great work

Rocksteady_Comics 2021-06-14 11:35:23 UTC #16

Here’s my comic! I could use all the feedback I can get so please don’t hold back. Thank you for doing this!

krzuniverse 2021-06-14 11:38:39 UTC #17

Here's mine You can be honest with your feedback!! Definitely no sugarcoating for me, I'm trying to grow as a writer, myself >.<

https://tapas.io/series/KRZ-Tiger-Winds

Kirieslawa 2021-06-14 12:06:37 UTC #18

thank you!

ensis02 2021-06-14 12:25:58 UTC #19

Oh, this seems really relevant--I redrew and rewrote the beginning of my comic entirely to nail the beginning.

The Unicorn Fencer

My approach was a little different--I finished the whole comic before beginning to post it, so I had a little time for revisions before I decided to put it up.
I'd love to know what people think and I have a sort of 'soft formula' for beginnings, if anybody wants to talk about them.

I really believe the beginning is the HARDEST part of the story to write.

DanielRKM 2021-06-14 15:07:42 UTC #20

Right on. Feel free to give this a read and I hope you dig it.

Aleksei 2021-06-14 15:15:40 UTC #21

Please, check it with no sugar, As a black coffe would be nice =D

Macarenaoftime 2021-06-15 03:22:45 UTC #22

I struggle a lot with first impressions, so any kind of feedback will be welcomed! Please don't sugarcoat it

asterluke 2021-06-15 04:09:32 UTC #23

I've been revamping this story multiple times, but I like the prologue I made for this new version. Hopefully whoever checks it out enjoys it! Book of Soul!