I'm gonna redo my comic need feedback on what to improve

[dbeirigo]

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[Aeneas1]

I suppose you could put in a few Classical mythology references.

[dbeirigo]

Can you give me examples?

[Aeneas1]

Well, perhaps you could include some obscure creatures from that mythology, such as kerkopes, a two-headed dog, lampads - that’s underworld nymphs - and such. You could also include quotes from various Latin and Greek poems, untranslated. You could even have a character get attacked by snakes and have the snakes curl themselves around that character’s body, reminiscent of Laocoon. Or maybe even have a character ride atop another character’s back in a manner reminiscent of Aeneas carrying Anchises. You could even take names from the myths, like Phineas (after the old man who encountered Jason). There are so many references you could make to that mythology and culture, and these are only a few examples.
Postscriptum. The poet I would most recommend you quote from would be the poet Catullus. Just be sure to prepare to do a lot of reading. Be sure also to refer to Homer, Ovid and Virgil. If you can find prose translations, I would recommend them.

[Kelheor]

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[dbeirigo]

yeah I was thinking of basing the aliens in mithological creatures and I'm thinking of taking inspiration from creatures from miths from all around the world but put my own twist on them, but the the idea of incorporating other mithological elements I haven't tought about, it's a great advice.

[SoftWonderBun]

I'm not inclined critique the plot as I don't know how much of it you have worked out already.

With the art, I believe I've said this to you before so forgive me if I have but the pages look very rushed. More time needs to be spent on the under-drawing, inking and learning how lighting works if you are going to go for a full color and rendered look.

These pages are from April, so it's hard to judge them if you have been working on improving since then. It would probably be beneficial to post work-in-progress of current art so you can be better helped.

[soda_the_coda]

I would remove, make more transparent and blur the red smudge on the backgound because it's hard to see the dynamics because of lack of contrast.

I know it's suppoused to be very stylized, but even then it's better to use references so the poses look more natural. Like on this examle his arm looks twisted because this is not how people would drink from a bottle in this position.
Also there is a big issue with lighting. First of all, if the light comes from the front then it shouldn't be on the edges. Also lighting is too complex and chaotic compared to the simplified shape of the character. And shadow definetely shouldn't overlap lighting!

Here, you should give more room for the text in the speech bubbles. The same with the characters, their heads are cut by the border. It's better to cut their knees or waist if you don't want to draw them in full size for any reason.

Also there's no transition panell between them being in space and the bandit who harasses the princess. What I mean like a panell with the planet landscape. This would balance the dynamic.

All in all, I'd recommend you to learn about storyboard storytelling, I'm sure there are plenty of tutorials for it.

[dbeirigo]

thanks, I will work on those things.