I saw your comic, it seems to have a much cleaner approach, just to let you know that drawings with hatch and cross-hatch are time consuming, yet somehow more rewarding 
Also, regardless of the style you use, the main importance shall be given to the story, story is king and will pretty much dictate if people will read a comic or not.
Style apart, the way tha girl is holding that book is weird, try yourself hold a book like that and it'll go straight to the floor, it's always a good execise to put yourself in the skin of your drawing poses to see if they're plausible 