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Aug 2021

O damn, it's over, isn't it? Well, I very nearly finished a page in 3 days, (despite not being home to work on it for one of these days). It was really cool, and I appreciate the thread.

Thank you!

@KiabIce So happy for you Kiab! Glad the challenge helped you out.

@vvodbow Yes, I'm terrible with routine. My schedule is always fluctuating, so this challenge was nice for a change. You're welcome.

@FafasMcMelt You're welcome! Yeah, can't believe it's over.

Okay, so I don't have much experience critiquing a script, but I'll do my best.

PROS: The story is pretty easy to follow. It seems to cover a good amount for its length. Good intro, middle, and ending. I like how you aren't following the 9 panel grid too rigidly, but instead altering it some.

CONS: Page 5 is a little sudden and the ending feels abrupt. Tara's narration sometimes sounds awkward. It sounds like she's just talking to herself or stating the obvious sometimes. But I'm terrible at dialogue, so not sure how to improve this. Lastly, I'm unsure what the title means.

Overall, it's really well written. Hope this feedback is helpful!

Thanks! this is definitely helpful!

as for the title, I was trying to give the vibe of "alien dimension". the "Scape" suffix is usually associated with big, wide locations in words like landscape or cityscape, but when you pair it up with certain words you get the meaning of a whole other dimension - see dreamscape or mindscape. the "Xeno" part was because it makes it sound inherently alien, since its used in a lot of alien related words, like xenomorph. but it also means "foreign or unknown", which is exactly what Tara is afraid of, and exactly the fear that this place makes her confront. so ends up meaning "foreign place" basically.
looks like this association game doesn't always work though lmao

You're welcome!

Okay, that makes sense about the title. I just feel like the title is not used anywhere within the comic. Usually titles are shown on a cover page, are incorporated into the dialogue, or are the name of something in the comic. It might help if you could incorporate it into the comic more.

Then again, I don't read much sci-fi, so maybe that's why I missed the hidden meaning. So you can totally ignore this if I'm off base.

Flops, four pages flatted out today along with a couple Smaugusts too... exciting to see I'm getting closer to the end of my first chapter so I can start the second XD

Oooof, time goes fast.....Managed to upload weekly Legends of Camelot and Superduperdoopyclub

For Rocky the Rock managed to update for two weeks.....but a mix of needing a rock-solid delivery for that part of the story (a key point) and getting a new job delayed that....

Thanks to everyone who stared at this topic and judged silently :grin:. The encouragement helped a lot.

So guess i got around 66% success rate.....the new job is another success but not related to comics :sweat_smile: