Hey, wait. Just HOLD UP. I think you’re thinking way too negatively about your work too much, I haven’t even sparked up the good parts yet since I was in a rush last night, so I ended up diversing the bad parts first to let you know that Im working on it.
Look, mate, proper writer or not, nobody will spark up everyone's interest. Maybe someone will criticised your novel, but it still amounts to a person who actually likes your story. Yes, it feels like a shame and a hopeless weight in your chest to know that someone didn't actually liked your story, but remember this fact—Harry Potter by J.K. Rowling has been rejected by publishers 12 times, and look where the novel stands right now.
Look, I want to clear it out to you that your story isn't a dissapointment. Please don't look down on your creation, and be proud of what you made. No writer is perfect, and we all start with that pitfall that will always makes us trip—our own words.
I don't want this to be the reason to kill your inspiration in writing Karana, so please don’t take it to heart. I know how it feels to be criticised, but hey, most people do it to help and let us know the parts which are killing our story, so it's more like of a lesson than a spout of dissatisfaction.
Please wait for the other part of my review, and I will show you the bright sides that makes your story unique.