Can't leave much comment. But as i browse through the prologue and chapter one. I find it intruguing and peak my interest in looking forward for the next chapter. But I have to say I do have some old fashioned mind-set in which I didn't really into BL category.
So far the explanation is good, the prologue is look more like a summary for me when the fantasy told story was written to attract more reader to your next chapter.
The interaction between Nathan and your M.C not only include their introduction but as well as their surrounding life when you explained his mother and the situation he's currently facing. Got a lot of sense in high schooler feelings as their mind always filled with wild idea.
The composition of the writing is rather refreshing and I didn't get bored with it. It just sometimes I saw a wordiness in some paragraph_(maybe it was just me who felt that way?)_ But over all, I can say it just have a good start for a teenage story book.
I am not a professional writer or a good critic/ commenter in other people works. I just write what I've seen so far and yes, it is working to be a readable book for audience.
I'll drop mine to here, as I'm tired of looking at the same number of subs over a month, it is time to start seeking for a new subs. Last but not least, keep posting more in promotion for a growth of audience as well as subs to your works, all the best!!