It is good. Albeit, it does not really tell me much of anything going on. Perhaps that is it being a prologue. I am unsure of what to interpret. Is it a game? Is it real life? Just need some sort of indicator.
In the last bit, there are quite a few comma splices (aka commas where they are not needed). I do this all time, heh. Just something to keep in mind as the breaks in the sentences make things look choppy at times.
