Looking for Honest Critique!

[CarlPiers]

Hello! I am looking for some honest, constructive criticism on my comic. If you could give some feedback that’d be great.

Meggi & Jes | Tapas

And if anyone would like to post their comic here for some critique, then be my guest! I’ll try to give some suggestions myself and maybe other people can give suggestions too.

[Tanako]

you don't have enough pages for a review talk less of critique. at least give your self some time until you have up to 20 or 25 pages so someone can have an idea of what direction the comic is going. I clicked on your link to check it out and only to see 3 pages of posted content that has absolutely nothing to offer. no one can critique that.

so my advice to you is, requests for a review once you have at least posted some more pages and like i mentioned earlier, about 20 to 25 should be fine. Heck, even 10 pages.

[Kelheor]

Well, brown eyes don't look good really it looks like they are high or something... Better stick with white. If you want coloured irises, they shouldn't be the size of the whole eyeball ^^
It's also better to leave more place between the panels.

[jcmraz]

There's very little to actually critique here at the moment but because you clearly want to improve. I would start by suggesting that you download a free photo editor to clean up the edges. Feel free to do watercolor of course But you should clean up the edges and create a more solid panel line so you can't tell as easily that you just cropped a picture of it.

For the pacing I would say it's a bit hard to follow but it's still very early. Just make sure what's happening is clear moving forward

For the art it's a good start and as long as you work hard at improving you should see it improve. I WOULD suggest studying realism on the side though. Understanding the human form better will help you exaggerate it and change it to better suit the way you want your art to look. You don't have to be drawing realism to benefit from learning it. Good art is based on fundamentals Keep that pencil moving!

[asaku]

There is not enough pages to get a clear grasp of what the comic is about but asuming is just a random jokes series, like what you would find in a newspapper, it actually looks good, the handwritting is neat and
easy to read but I found the brown eyes to be too distracting.
Also I would like to take your offer, here is my comic, I just uploaded and I wanted to hear some opinions of it

Mas Blanco que Negro Pokemon B&W2 nuzlocke | Tapas

[malverav]

So I'm going to give the most objective crit I can and start with saying that I'm going to avoid judgement calls based on my taste - that's 'the brown eyes look weird and I don't like them' sort of crit, which is not a critique and more a taste thing. My taste thing as a watercolourist is to try avoiding watermarks - do your wash from top to bottom smoothly and don't mess with it once it's down, or you get watermarks. Feel free to ignore me if it's an effect you're going for.

I would recommend getting a high quality scanner or taking pictures in an environment with more diffused light. It also seems as if you're drawing very small (just based on the pen width - is that ballpoint? it's bleeding badly with the watercolour and is distracting), so if you can, try giving yourself more room to play with. Also don't be afraid to work in more backgrounds or to use a ruler.

I would also rec from a legibility point of view to use block capitals because I'm struggling to read the text.

Basically, everyone's first 50 pages are rough as hell, so I'd love to see what you're like once you've got some more pages and some more practice of the fundamentals under your belt! I can only crit what I see, and I'd love to see more of it.

[LovelyOtter]

Very cute idea!

I would suggest making the comic slower, since I don't understand why there's a ghost. I wouldn't put random things in a comic like that, you should have it build up before something crazy happens. Also, try to make the characters have reactions to each other when they talk.

I would also suggest giving the character more emotions, since right now they're pretty stone-faced. Also, don't give them brown eyes like that. You should outline the pupil in brown if you really want eye color, and then have the whites of the eyes. Alternatively, you could just do black ovals, which works just fine.

[CarlPiers]

Thank you everyone for the critique! I know I’m just starting out, but I know I’d like to have problems arise earlier than later.
I am working on the fundamentals and techniques and learning some more each day. And I actually never really thought of the eyes that much. Now that it has been mentioned, I see how it is a little distracting. I’ll definitely be working to improve that! Anyways, thank you everyone.