Looking for honest reviews on my comic!

[sefra114]

Hello! As of today I have finished sharing the entire first chapter of my comic, Space Pack! I'd love to get some feedback on it, the story, art, characters, anything! I'm always open to honest critique and appreciate any thoughts you may have!

Thanks so much in advance!

Space Pack | Tapas

[Aleksei]

Hi there!
First, I am happily impresed! I am not ashamed to say that most of the time the webcomics lacks quality in certain areas, but your work keept me interested all the way till the end. That is hard to do and must be recognized.
The good things! Script, you are great with the planing and overall ideas to keep the story going, the jokes, and the cliffhanger to attract people over the next loading page. Absolutely great.
The not so great, but not at all bad. Drawing. I know that this is a hard issue to take, because its what hurts the most for a comic artist, but hear me first, you are not wrong in the path that you are going. I think that your style might benefit from the use of vector style drawing and painting, and it would have a feel like 'Gravity Falls', or, if you can go into a different direction and try to detail more of the backgrounds and it would look a bit more like 'Scott Pilgrim'. Also, the Paneling could be better, but worry not, it could be a lot worse too, so for me its a good instead of a bad.

That is my overall critique.
Hope to see more from you in the future, don't give up!

[sefra114]

Hi Aleksei!

Thank you so much for taking the time to read through my comic and give me your feedback, I greatly appreciate it!! (And for subscribing, too!!)

Your thoughts are very helpful, going over the script and story aspects, as well as the artwork with advice and even examples for directions I can aim for to improve my drawings! I take no offense at all and will definitely be keeping everything you've said in mind. Also great to know about the paneling. Glad it's a bit more good than bad, haha! Going to focus more on that as well. A fantastic, honest critique, once again you have my thanks!!

[Aleksei]

No problem at all! It was a pleasure to read! =D

[grantingtherant]

Subscribed. I love how expressive the characters are, especially with all the crazy stuff going on. The art seems a bit rough, though, particularly the backgrounds. I like how they're painted to stand out amongst the characters, though I think the backgrounds could use a little cleaning up. Also, I feel like the pages don't fade into each other super well. It's not too much of an issue, more an aesthetic nitpick if anything. I've noticed comics tend to blend a little bit better when they use a page border.

I enjoy the characters so far. I get the feeling that Bally had to grow up kind of fast for her age, considering her parents seem to be busy/not there and she seems poor. I can feel Bally's friendship with Andy, and Andy himself seems like the kind of guy who has your back. I look forward seeing how you write Bally and her friends in the future. Everything so far seems pretty consistent with the aesthetic of the 90s, and it's not rubbing it in my face.

Hope you find my feedback helpful!

[sefra114]

THANK YOU very much for reading through my comic, subscribing, and especially for sharing all your thoughts! I would definitely have to agree on the backgrounds. My hope is sometime down the line is to go back, clean them up, and add more detail. Make them seem more 'lived in'. And that's a great point about the blending of the pages! I hadn't thought much about that but I think you're right! I previously worked on a black & white comic before this, where that wasn't much of an issue. Now that you mentioned it, I'm realizing it was something I should've paid more attention to in Space Pack!

As for the characters, so happy to hear you say that. The feelings you are having about them are perfect, just what I'd hope for! Also awesome you find the 90s aesthetic not too overwhelming. It's been my goal to capture the feel without pandering too much to nostalgia, haha! Thanks again for your feedback, I really appreciate it a ton!

[grantingtherant]

No problem, I'm glad I could be a help! ^^