I've edited the episode about a story inspired by the Burning Sun Scandal + Abduction of Persephone.
I am looking for the feedback on the content and expression of the story.
Does the story successfully deliver the message about:
1. "Beauty can be a curse and fuel of jealousy"?
2. "One bad decision in life could mean losing your love ones forever"?
3. "Girl! Stop dreaming about married into some rich/noble/royal household!"?
4. "Guard your heart against greed!"
The updated story is here: -> https://tapas.io/episode/2317864
Is the story successfully express the above 4 points? If no, where should I edit more?