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Hello there!

I've started a daily comic recently, and since I just uploaded the 5th episode I figured there was enough content to ask for some feedback on the forum :slight_smile:

So here I am! The plot is just a light and cute little story about two children for now, and, as much as I would like you to enjoy it, I also hoped you could give me some insight on its weaknesses!

In short, please help me improve the series ahah :slight_smile:

That's all I had to say I think...? Thank you for reading :blush:

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Well isn't that adorable. It's a light and heartwarming story, I'm sure people will love it.

My only critique would be regarding the art. I like it's simplicity--I think it fits the ambiance perfectly--but it could be a little messy at times. Try using a consistent brush size when drawing, and draw in one smooth stroke, instead of going back and forth on one spot. If you have difficulty with the latter one, first draw a sketch (that can be as messy as you wish for it to be), then add a layer and ink the sketch on the new layer.

I hope that helped :slight_smile:

I personally really like it. Working with kids I can honestly say you captured them perfectly. I just can't say more because there aren't a lot of eps/panels yet. BUT I did subscribe :slight_smile:

Thank you :blush:

I see, you're right about that! Until now, I haven't been drawing sketches beforehand for two reasons :

  • It takes more time
  • And I'm scared of losing the "flow" of the first draft, the clean version often seems less expressive than the sketch to me...

However I know sketch->inking is the base of proper drawing, so I guess it's just me being too lazy and unexperimented ahah
You definitely helped though, I'll try forcing myself to do a sketch beforehand! Thank you!

Thank you very much :slight_smile:

Happy to have some positive feedback about the characters! Though I don't plan on making them stay children for long ahah
Also, thanks for the sub :wink:

You've just earned yourself a subscriber, @TeoChhim !!!

I thoroughly enjoyed what I just read. The simplicity of the style makes for very easy reading - it's not cluttered at all, and the dialogue we are given hints at the type of setting and society that the characters are placed in. That means you are doing very efficient world building WITHOUT having to spend hours drawing backgrounds and settings, so far!!

I like the loose way in which you have used colours and lines. For example, how the orange colour of the flames is not contained by the lines in the first comic - that looks great!

I really enjoyed the comedic pacing too. Everything so far is delivered in a pleasing way that had me smiling and chuckling as I scrolled.

I don't have any negative feedback, honestly. Going forward I would say continue to focus on the quality of your dialogue, and continue to value the importance of small moments between characters! This is a great start, and if you build upon this correctly I could see it being a big success :slight_smile:

Keep it up!

Have you done gestures before? There's two sites that are decent with timers you can try.

http://reference.sketchdaily.net/en1
https://line-of-action.com/practice-tools/figure-drawing

The idea of the gesture is to draw the head, spine and the immediate body part that you think is important.

You do a gesture (if you've never done one before), by looking at the model for 2min, then 1min, then 30sec, then less time and less time until you have just 5 seconds to draw the core. Then you get really fluid motion.
It sounds crazy, and is insane as you're doing it (gets your blood pumping lol) but it will really improve the fluidity of art.

I am bookmarking those websites! This will be a good challenge for me and will hopefully help me improve a lot :blush:

Wow all those compliments, thank you so much o.o !!

Happy to see someone noticing this lazy world building so early ahahah
The plot will thicken a bit with time, but since I wanted the story to be fast-paced, I decided to cut everything I could and mention briefly what I couldn't.
That's why the comic kinda seems like an illustrated summary of the story ahah
I'm lazy by nature and I get easily bored of drawing if the story doesn't progress fast enough, so I guess this is the answer I found to cope with my inconsistency xD

I'll try my best to keep going that way!
Though the story will change direction a little bit at a certain point.

Once again, thank you very much :blush: !

I've never heard of that before, this sounds amazing :o !
I'm bookmarking those websites as well, thank you!

Seriously, it's a very cool training that will definitely help anybody, have you considered sharing it with a post in the forum? Would be cool to see artists sharing their attempts and having fun together :slight_smile:

I always figured that most artists knew about gestures ? lol It's a very basic thing they teach you in art classes, outside of the assignments of : draw 50 feet pictures, draw 50 hand pictures, and sit in a busy cafe and draw the people you see milling around.

I like the idea of sharing gestures ! :smiley:

It makes sense that it's taught early in art classes!! Some folk (like me!) have never had an art class though, so it's super useful when people share these resources!

I think my New Year's resolution will be to take part in these practices far more often!