Thank you for the ink.
Just letting you know that I'm running a inksgiving race where the supporter can support one of my characters to win the Grand Prix.
The names are:
Blue, Miss Blue, Yellow, Red, Purple
Who will you give your support to?
Ooh this is an interesting looking comic.
Overall, it's pretty polished in terms of the quality of the art and how it's put together, with a consistent art style, good inking and colours, but there are some things that jumped out at me:
The speech bubbles at times don't quite leave enough breathing room for the text inside them, and the thick white stroke on them set to outside positioning gives the tails this rounded, snubbed kind of look. They'd look a little more polished and finished if you made them a little larger to give the text breathing room, avoided tangents caused by the square bubbles sitting on panel borders and set the stroke's position to centre or inside.
Lack of a proper establishing shot makes it really hard to drink in the atmosphere or the situation the protagonist is in. The camera is always pulled right in on him, not really showing much of his situation, and because the shots are always pulled in so tight, when there are close-ups, they're robbed of impact, because they're barely any closer than the majority of the shots. I can't really get invested in the mystery of what's going on because I don't feel like I'm getting a really strong impression of where the protagonist is (it looks like a school, but it's full of dead adults and the main character also looks like an adult, but he doesn't seem confused by this?).
Sometimes the expressions of the main character don't really seem extreme enough for the awful situation he's in. He looks mostly a bit bewildered and surprised while waking up under a pile of corpses, getting told he's to blame by a dude in an extremely gory state, then seeing him die, and then witnessing somebody getting eaten by a dog. I don't feel as horrified as I probably should because the protagonist's expression and bodylanguage are more like he's in a weird scenario rather than an utterly horrifying one that'd probably cause most people to throw up or have a panic attack.
I felt like the colours were very bright and warm and generally sunny feeling for the tone of the bloody scene that was going down, and it robbed the scene of some impact. I understand that the scene is happening during the day, but some harsh contrast in the light and shadows, and less warm, soft colours would add a bit of weight and power to the story.
The blood feels very watery and thin because it's so pale and transparent, so it doesn't really evoke the horror of being covered in human blood because it looks fake, like watery red paint. The overuse of premade splatter brushes makes it hard to miss that they've been used. Maybe use them more in conjunction with other techniques, and try to get a bit more richness and depth to the blood.
Overall, it definitely has potential, it just feels a bit like it's trying to do horror while pulling punches on being horrifying. A little more atmosphere and intensity would really help sell the scenario and tone.
thank you for the kind words, and checking out my comic, once ive had some sleep i will come back with feedback for you, so far from what i saw the art looks great so looking forward to reading it.
Thank you very much for such a detailed review, I defiently agree with the speach bubbes and will give it a try, i was trying to make them unique and make sure that they could be read on mobile easily. But with your suitations i think i can make it work.
I actuelly already have up to Chapter 20 Drawn out, and there are a lot more establishing shots one everytime the scene changes or room changes , the 1st episode is kind of puporsely done this way, so you dont have a clue whats going on and later will find out.
With the experssion and everything and how he is not too shocked by the situation is also explained on in later episodes, the series will go between past and future events and the main charecter starts to become more emtinal due to a friend in the series.
The colors i also agree, orginally it was ment to be a horror story with intense scenes and builds up, but this later changed to more of an action story. Honestly this changed due to when this was being published by another website they wanted everything PG.
Again thank you so much, the feedback is great, and i will take on boared defiently with the establishing shots and speech bubles.
I left a short review in the comments for you, but I think the most important review comment is that I subscribed. You’re off to a FANTASTIC start. I love mystery and I love a bit of horror and it is just the right level of gore where I didn’t keel over. I have questions, so I hope you have answers!!!
Keep it up!
All I can say of that... I Subscribe it!!!
I read it as I listen to this one, that feels the picture more alive.
That was some pictures he shirt was white 
Please come and read my Prologue of The Catmen Sorceress1 instead for ink... but you also welcome to ink 500 and be in the lottery
Hi thank you for cheking out my comic, i saw your series as well i love the panelling in it makes it very intresting, i also sent you some ink for taking your time to read my series
I like it so far! The art is good and consistent. It's a really interesting hook to start a comic with. My only thing is that there is a fine line between comedy and horror, and so it would help a great deal to swing more horror if the color scheme wasn't so friendly? Unless you want it to be on that fine line as a dark humor. Personally, I enjoy that type of humor, but if that wasn't what you were going for, the timing might desire more establishing shots to build up to the horror reveals to make them more scary.
And you don't have to drop me any ink, ps, mines not unlocked yet
It’s funny you should say that, since I was just studying the paneling in yours! I need to master that brilliant pace you have. It has just the right amount of scrolling to maintain the tension.
Looking forward to future updates!
The first episode is ment to be more shock, but it does later go into that, dark humor style, a lot of the humor had to be cut out though because of again the publisher i was orginally with wanted me to make it PG, so a lot of scenes and jokes had to be changed.
Thank you for taking your time reading and reviewing the story.
Art looks polished overall, the pacing is believable and feels like it's in real time and there's enough suspense to keep you reading. I really like the design of the dog. THere are certain panels where the poses look slightly off and stiff, not glaringly so though. Overall I think it can satisfy horror/action niche, though I"m not sure if it's able to bring over people who wouldn't normally be into that sorta thing. Feels like a very plot driven story.
If you have time to do a review: I'd love a review of my new comic: https://www.webtoons.com/en/challenge/counterfeit-wings-/list?title_no=318851
and a link to my tapas profile: https://tapas.io/series/Pseudo-Wings
thank you that makes sense scince it is very story driven but i guess its a story for those type of people, hey i cheked out your story the art style I love and it reads well. my only problem is the font choice, the font is not a comic font and is a normal text font which makes the story feel unprofessinal if you just changed that i think you would be golden
This is quite intriguing. I felt like I was watching a movie. I am a huge fan of horror and this is giving me 'Parasyte' vibes. The art is great too! Cannot wait to read this during night and lose my sleep in fear. However, just be careful of the spellings.
Btw this is my series. Its not much...lol
