New To Comics - Would love your Feedback

Kittosaurus 2018-09-12 01:00:30 UTC #1

Hi There!

My name is Devon, but I often go by Kittosaurus. I just recently uploaded my first webtoon:

The Librarian Arachnid Slayer

I was hoping that I could get some feedback!

fischhead 2018-09-12 04:34:27 UTC #2

Looks great! It has a storybook aesthetic that is really appealing to me. You're making good use of the vertically scrolling format as well. My comics are geared toward print, so I'm having to slice them up and butcher the artwork on some of the first episodes. Subbed so I can read all the episodes before giving feedback on story.

DeformedSunflower 2018-09-12 19:45:07 UTC #3

I really like the more vertical-inclined format of panelling (like the first two panels in chapter 2). It feels more engaging and interesting, so I think you should implement more of them into your comic.
Another thing I think the characters can use a little bit more variety in their expressions. I know that Alice is constantly distressed, but you can play with the levels of her distress; change the shape of her mouth, knot her eyebrows, make her cry. Little things like this will add a layer of depth to your art.

I hope you find this useful!

Kittosaurus 2018-09-13 01:22:09 UTC #4

@fischhead thank you for your feedback! That is the one benefit of starting out on webtoon as it has allowed me to design my panels for their format. Thank you for the sub! I hope that you don't have too many issues cropping your panels!

Kittosaurus 2018-09-13 01:28:45 UTC #5

Thank you! You will definitely like the next Episode then! I have been trying to incorporate more of those

I agree! I have been trying to work on my range of expressions! And will continue to strive to improve. Thank you for your suggestions! I find Alice's design the most challenging as she is more simplistic then the other characters and I find it hard to give her the same range.