Hello, welcome to Tapas. I took a look at your comic, my biggest issue with it was a number of spelling and grammatical issues. You might want to have someone look over your outlines for you and help you fix things like that, it's pretty distracting to me at least. Ruins the flow. Beyond that, you're working on a comic and that's the first step. It's obvious you're a fan of anime given the plot, but there's nothing wrong with that there's definitely a fan-base for that obviously.
My comic: