Hey Stargazer~
@Stargazer31 Thanks for offering up your comic. I'll keep in mind the page gutters.
The cover
To start with, the title is incredibly difficult to make out in the black background. Since the mobile and website now no longer show the title in text under our rectangle thumbnails, it's vital to make sure the reader can read your title.
Just make the text thicker and white and we'll be able to know what the story is called.
That aside the figure on the cover is too small. I'm interested in the light in their hand but I can't make it out. Definitely make that figure bigger so we can see a few more details..
The Summary
Gunhild Gretadottir is the Realmwalker- Asgard's backup warrior, constantly saving the 9 worlds. Follow her adventures through Norse, British and Celtic folklore, accompanied by several Norse gods, a water horse, a few assorted Valkyries, and a bag of runestones.
I do like a summary that tells me the protagonist's name. However the rest of the summary has both a lot going on and not much.
If she's Asgard's backup warrior, why is she constantly saving the 9 worlds? Who specifically are some of the Norse gods that accompany her? Perhaps you can specifically mention the details of her first adventure so we get a sense of what the story is about in terms of action, rather than the cast of characters.
The First part
Art: It's cute and simple and it delivers the story, which is all the art should do.
Text Bubbles: Way too small. It's a bit of a task for me to read even on the desktop and more difficult on the phone. Which is a shame cause I am interested to find out what happens when they mentioned a surge of magic in Kensington...like what's gonna happen? However it it's hard to read a comic, then a casual reader might just not make the effort.
The size and font of your text is among the easiest adjustments to make (though it could take time to do any revisions and I am loathe to recommend any artist in the middle of telling a story to do revisions cause that breaks momentum of production, but once the story is done, I recommend going back and at least making the font larger so it's easier to read.)
The reason comics also use 'comic' fonts or all caps is that the 'hitbox' for the words all fit into neat rectangles with makes it easier and faster to read. It also looks nicer in a composition when arranged into the diamond shape you see in good mobile comics.
If a comic is not legible, the story won't matter if the reader has a hard time actually reading the words.
You've got plenty of room in your bubbles to use something like Anime Ace or Lafayette Comic Pro or a BlamBot font. I had resisted all caps fonts for a while until I realized that the dialogue is just a means of communicating to the reader and is meant to be unnoticed but easy to digest. When Font calls attention to itself it pulls the reader away from the story.
Storytelling: Totally didn't think Laurel would be an actual monster, just a perfectly awful stepmom. I loved the reveal, it surprised me and I am pleased. (This first few chapters of Sigrun's wedding would be great to add to your summary to hook people in, something like: Gunhild's invited to her half sister's wedding despite how much her stepmother hates her. But after trying to leave early she discovers that her stepmother isn't who she seems and is about to bring utter chaos to Midgard! | this would help the reader ask the question: will Gunhild be able to stop her?)
The story is straightforward and keeps moving so it's got good pace. More than that, I'm really invested in Gunhild saving her half-sister. I'm also a fan of mythology so all the references and bits of info are fun.
All the more reason I think larger font and definitely adding some early plot details to your summary will help entice readers to start and keep reading. The story's good, it just needs to be a more legible comic.