Hi, it is Nova here! I’m currently seeking feedback on the first chapter of my MxM (BL) sports romance story. It is not finished yet, but since I split it into parts, the first 2 ones are already posted here on Tapas. But since it is a continuation, I prefer using this link for the feedback: https://editor.reedsy.com/s/eHOdf6O/c/ZTiP6b9eilCxSw0N/chapter-1
Note: The lines between are for me where I split to post the parts.
It is around 4,300 words. In exchange, I'm happy to provide detailed feedback on the first three chapters of your story. While I'm open to any genre, I'm especially interested in swapping feedback with someone who writes or enjoys BL/LGBTQ+ stories or is at least comfortable engaging with queer themes.
I prefer private messages or Discord, this is my id doodlemcfiddle.
Sidelines Blurb:
~Ethan~ In my final year of college, I had hoped for peace, yet here I am, unexpectedly tutoring Jackson, the college football star. The embodiment of everything I tried to avoid; popular, talented, and on the brink of a pro football career. He is a world away from my quiet life of books and part-time shifts at a clothing store, haunted by a high school heartbreak. But when Jackson enters my world, everything shifts. He’s not just the jock I thought I knew. There’s more to him, and he sees more in me than anyone ever has. With my past heartbreak and his complex life, I know things are bound to get messy.
~Jackson~ Football’s my life. The rush of the game, the roar of the fans, it’s where I shine. Off the field, it's a different game and that's because of my family’s expectations and a future mapped out for me. But when my grades threatened everything I worked for, Ethan walked in – my unexpected tutor. I figured it’d be easy, but there’s something about him. I thought he hated me but the more I got to know him, the more I want to uncover. Quiet, smart, and my total opposite. As my tutor, he was supposed to help me with my grades. But he ended up teaching me a lot more, especially about feelings I didn’t know I had.
Sidelines is an MM (BL) romance where polar worlds collide. Dive into this enemies-to-lovers journey as two college students navigate the challenges of love, expectations, and the surprises life throws their way.
