Pomote yourself but tell me what you think about my comic :)

Adriano 2020-05-07 12:47:43 UTC #1

Hi! I am Adriano!

Please promote yourself here! You're welcome to do it.
In exchange tell me what you think about my series. Criticism is very welcome cause it's a new series

LadyN 2020-05-07 13:05:08 UTC #2

I find it funny that your action story is named Cheese Hunters. I usually don’t read comic, since I’m used to reading paragraphs and my brain doesn’t really look at the pictures much, but I must say, based off what I saw, I can tell that these mice don’t take their job seriously!

I think the art style is interesting! It is very appealing to look at. This next part is more of a preference but I prefer colors that aren’t so saturated. So looking at this gave me a minor headache but it’s not bad, it’s just not what I’m used to.

I think it was really cool to read the first chapter. I’m subscribing though, so beware of my existence!

Based off the fact that you made a webcomic, I can tell you might be more interested in looking at writing than reading whole paragraphs of descriptions. But I’m dropping this story in regardless.

This is Hope Like Ashes: Numb. It’s not even done but I’m going to edit Chapters 1-3 because I’m not satisfied with what I did with the formatting.

Note to anybody seeing this: I don’t update frequently but I’m getting back into it

Adriano 2020-05-07 13:55:43 UTC #3

Hahahah thank you for subscription. I don't usually read written stories. But I will give it a try soon

LadyN 2020-05-07 14:12:59 UTC #4

I had a feeling.

It’s not uncommon for some people to perfect visual media

magnavarra 2020-05-07 18:57:37 UTC #5

way too much text. concider changing pacing, and more consistant fonts - i mean all text had different alignment etc

sophiacraft101 2020-05-07 19:23:16 UTC #6

I really loved how you did the cityscape in the first panel, it did a great job of introducing your style and the series. I would consider spacing things out a bit more though since it can make the story a bit harder to follow, From what I've seen though, it looks like it will be a great series with interesting/loveable characters.

Here is my shameless self-promotion:

brilliiant 2020-05-07 19:26:24 UTC #7

I agree there's too much text! But I think your sense of motion is really good. I just think you could use a little less is more in general.

All the frames are really crowded and there's very little breathing room between beats. After reading through the first chapter all the way I think you'll also communicate like 3 ideas per panel and it's usually a good idea to just make one panel about one thing.

I think with a little bit of a formatting change this'll be really good.

I also struggled a lot with paneling and trying to say too much at once in my comic initially. Just try to observe how other people are telling their stories and you should be fine!