NINTH UPDATE! (Replies 83-93)
Dan @dsptss78
=I…don’t know how to feel about this. The dialogue feels very on-the-nose and almost…childish?? Like, it reads like something created by a third-grader, although you can tell by the language used that a 10-year-old probably didn’t write it…which makes it uncomfortable…
That, and the art could definitely use some work. =/ Like a lot.
Plot Armor Academy @PriestofDudeism
-A very creative premise; I’ve never heard anything like it…
-I like the art style...It’s a little rough, but in a cute way~
-…Okay, the writing is a little confusing. Even the order of the speech bubbles…in one panel they read left to right, and then in the next they read right to left…das not gud
=So the line between writing a comic about bleh characters and actually writing bleh characters is kind of thin…and I feel like you might be straddling it. ^^;
Like, I can see where the comic is going, and there are some good ideas in there…but in and of itself, it’s more confusing than enjoyable. And this is just the beginning; the meta jokes aren’t even stale yet (and they will get stale eventually. I’m currently re-writing a meta comic, so I know…you gotta have more than that to offer).
I think it could benefit from a good editor, at least to sharpen up the jokes. I feel like there’s actually a lot of humor in there, and if less of it fell flat it would definitely improve the quality of the comic by leaps and bounds.
Doctored Chance: The Unpleasant Preceding of "Pajama Boy" and What Drove Him to Murder @thealooffloof
-I feel like the title is a bit unwieldy…I get that it’s supposed to be charming, but unfortunately it doesn’t really roll off the tongue. And I’m not sure what ‘preceding’ is supposed to mean in that context…
-Eeeee, your writing style is really…something~. Something good, by the way. ^^ It feels so very fresh and novel…and professional, too.
=It’s hard to know what to say…I have no idea what this story will be about. And yet, I enjoy reading it, which is a great sign if I’ve ever seen one. ;] Rock on; can’t wait to see where this goes~
Rosie and the Reaper @akitsukino
-At first I didn’t understand where the story had gone, and I was so confused…that’s what I get for doing this 2 months after the fact, I guess…=P
-This grimm reaper character looks so…oddly innocent. ^^; It freaks me out a little, ngl…
=It’s unfortunate that I got here too late to react to the whole thing, but anyway: overall, it feels kinda basic? =/ I think the art is good— could definitely be better, but it’s already above-average (especially the coloring). The story so far feels kinda predictable, though; doesn’t seem to bring many new ideas to the concept.
…That, and I want to like the Reaper but his face is so uncanny I just can’t look at him. >_<
