Post any comic/novel here and I will give it a shot for ~5 pages (REACT EDITION)

quintellit 2024-01-14 21:10:02 UTC #357

Here you go!!

New update coming soon!!

DokiDokiTsuna 2024-07-02 03:39:29 UTC #358

TWENTY-THIRD UPDATE! (Replies 283-300)
Well, here I am, back at it again...starting with some year-old submissions this time around; it's getting dire. ^^; Ah well, I just suddenly got motivated to come back to this, and as this is one of the few surviving topics that's old enough not to auto-close, I kinda feel like it would be a waste not to drag it out as long as possible. :T

Son of Fire @gh0st_V
-I LOVE the chapter titles. I love them! They’re all so cool~
-“But we were young enough not to know the difference between love and familial bonds”→ this line feels misleading...it’s saying that love and familial bonds are not equivalent, and implies that the characters were too young and naive to know that. Further implying that someone they have a familial bond with, i.e. Aunt Silva, will turn out not to love them...but I’m not getting that vibe from the other descriptions of her. Idk, either I’m seeing the foreshadowing you want me to see, or something’s up...
-“As a child I was baptized, submerged in water to give myself to God. How could something so merciless be a symbol of salvation?”→ You have...seen a baptism before, right? Like, in the modern day…?? ^^; You don’t waterboard the baby or anything; it’s no more “merciless” than giving them a normal bath. Unless you’ve had an experience I haven’t had…
I’d like to think that ‘merciless’ simply refers to water itself, reflecting the MC’s fears by generalizing them over the whole element. But the “ever since” line right after this makes this unlikely...it really reads like they’re living with trauma from something that should not have been traumatic, without explaining why.
-An “elegant” extremely clunky first line of dialogue...MC is being tortured and yet you’re having him talk like a robot. “Fuck you. I already told you I have no idea what the hell you’re talking about.” → “Fuck you. I already told you, I don’t know what you’re talking about!!” People under duress usually speak in shorter, more emotional phrases.
=You’re in an odd position that I don’t see a lot of writers in...your descriptive writing is incredible. The images you paint of the ‘emotional scenery’, so to speak, are powerful and striking. Unfortunately, the dialogue is nowhere near the same level, and it just kills the story...I’m immersed, and then a character opens their mouth and I’m pulled right out of the action, again and again. Either the things they say don’t fully make sense or don’t sound fitting for the situation, or both.
I realize this novel began 2 years ago though, so I hope you’ve grown into your writing style a little more by now, and learned to improve your characters’ speech. I think that’s all you need to take your work from “okay-ish” to “amazing”.

The weight of the universe @SirCoockie
-Interesting style you have going on with the title art there...I dig it~
-I think the “how to read a manga” diagram is a little unnecessary...if you’ve seen those in localized print manga, it’s likely because some publisher back in the day realized that whatever 12-year-old picked it up could easily have no idea what manga is or how it works.
In this day and age, most manga do not have those anymore. ^^; Especially not web manga...it’s fair to assume that the viewer already knows what’s going on, and if not, a simple “this comic reads from right to left” somewhere in the description should suffice.
-The lack of punctuation really hurts the impact of this dialogue. =/ It’s hard to discern the tone of the lines that are being said when the whole comic reads like one long text convo...
=Feels like 10% story, 90% air. All the characters are constantly chattering about data and results and mysteries, and yet the reader is given only the tiniest, slightest hints about what it’s all for. And then, every time it looks like some concrete story element is about to be revealed, we jump to a new cast of characters that we can watch chatter about vague ideas. There’s a fine line between building suspense and just stringing the reader along, refusing to actually tell them anything worthwhile, and I think you crossed it. :T
The problem is that there’s nothing to hold onto in the meantime. The art is rough, the dialogue is wooden, and there’s not a lot of character on display. If you’re not gonna give the reader information, fine; but you still need to entertain them in some other way.

Light Rising @morganicfoods
-I like the background/setting artwork...I just wish the drawings of the characters were of similar quality…
=...It’s OK, I guess. A very...average comic; not good, not bad. It’s hard to know what to say about it…
If I had to say something, I think the character convos could stand to be a little more informative...y’know, actually give us a chance to learn who these people are and care about them, before we’re stuck watching them trade empty banter.
It’s not that your dialogue is awful; far from it, but as someone who just started reading I’m really not interested in watching Girl B tell Girl A she’s not gonna make it in the auditions in 7 different ways across two whole episodes...it just feels dull and repetitive, and like you could be using this time for better things.

Gamers Guff @WhoDrew
=Very...unfunny, unfortunately…
...Well, mostly unfunny. Episode 5 felt like an actual joke and made me smile, at least. Then the next 2 episodes did not, and I figured it was time to quit.
It feels weird, because the comic seems pretty popular, but to be 100% honest I don’t know what all these people see in it. ¯_(=/)_/¯ There’s no real humor; it’s just a bunch of over-the-top reactions without any setup. Fortunately I know enough about video games to “get” what’s supposed to be funny about most of these situations, but that also means I know enough to realize that you’re just barely communicating it.
Also, I feel like the synopsis is misleading...the two brothers are “as polar opposite as you can imagine”, despite the fact that the comics are not long enough or complex enough to characterize either of them in any meaningful way. =/
They “literally go inside the games”...despite the fact that half the time they’re just doing meta-commentary on the games like any normal fan would. =/ It’s weird that the premise is already being betrayed in just the first few episodes; like if you knew that early on that you wanted to do something different, you could’ve just changed the description…
...In a word: underwhelming.

Chasing Grief @rainwang
=In a word: messy.
Poetry is an exercise of style; there needs to be something intentional about how you choose and arrange your words, something that helps make the reader feel what you want them to feel. And I would encourage you to ask yourself what that stylistic quality is supposed to be, because I’m not seeing it. Simply making some of the words rhyme occasionally isn’t enough (especially when you keep randomly changing the rhythm and placement); I CAN feel the emotion you’re trying to convey, but the “poetry” is so devoid of style that I can’t help asking myself “why isn’t this just prose?” It feels more like pretty prose arranged into stanzas than an actual poem….either you need to implement a stronger rhyme/syllabic structure or you need to let it go completely; dabbling in the middle like this is just disorienting to read, it makes it look like you don’t really know what you want to do.
You’re definitely the best poet I’ve seen yet in this thread, and your work seems to get better as it goes. But from what I’ve read in the first handful of episodes, there’s a lot of room to improve.

finleydeandre 2024-07-02 05:12:31 UTC #359

Have a daily comic strip called The Experiment check it out, subscribe let me know if you like it or if you don't either way is cool with me. The Experiment

Aero 2024-07-02 05:22:23 UTC #360

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yelThepepper 2024-07-02 06:54:42 UTC #361

Hello everyone:, here's my novel: https://tapas.io/series/Swords-of-Pangasia/info, hope you can check it.

supriyashukla2398 2024-07-29 14:12:21 UTC #362

Do Read My Novel,

Milo, a cheerful yet impoverished college student, navigated his days with a smile despite his financial struggles. However, his life took a dark turn when he witnessed a cold-blooded murder by a menacing tall man. The murderer noticed him, and from that moment on, Milo felt the man's eyes on him everywhere.

One evening, Milo found his parents at the mercy of the same tall man. To save their lives, his parents shockingly offered Milo's marriage to the murderer. "Please, take our son instead," his mother pleaded. "He'll marry you. He'll do anything you want. Just spare our lives."

Milo felt his world tilt as the words sank in. "Marry this man?" His mind reeled at the thought, but he saw the steely resolve in the man's eyes, the gun still aimed at his parents.

The tall man considered their proposal, his eyes never leaving Milo. After a long, tense moment, he lowered his weapon. "Very well," he said. "Your son will come with me."

Milo's life changed in an instant. The cheerful college boy who once worried about exams and part-time jobs was now bound to a man whose presence alone instilled fear.

daiji 2024-07-29 15:32:16 UTC #363

NEW UPDATE!!!!
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4 pages of INTRODUCTION
STARTS HERE
VIA TAPAS.APP

GLOBAL COMIX
https://globalcomix.com/c/1-and-a-half/chapters/en/2/2

DokiDokiTsuna 2024-08-07 02:00:43 UTC #364

TWENTY-FOURTH UPDATE! (Replies 308-314)

Galaxies, Magical Girls, and Chaos @hanielmea
-Starting off the big, dramatic inciting incident by not even letting us see the character emote...is not a great idea. =/
-Also, adding ‘hell’ to dialogue doesn’t automatically make the conversation sound more intense or mature. :T It’s really jarring to have these honestly dry scenes and dry statements immediately followed up by characters asking ‘what the hell?’ It feels aggressively un-stylish, like you’re trying desperately to inject some energy into the story with (mild) cursing alone.
=Very bland, unfortunately. I can tell what you’re trying to do, treating magical girl-hood as something mundane and not all that noteworthy in this world (despite opening the story with the character discovering a mysterious object and screaming once their magical dress appears…). But the way you blatantly skip over any sort of worldbuilding or establishment of character or stakes makes the story feel hollow. We skip over any discussion of what a magical girl is to watch the characters blandly state ‘looks like you’re a magical girl now’. We skip over any discussion of what a monster is or why magical girls fight them to watch the mascot companion introduce its ability to speak through painfully obvious exposition.
For all these dull interactions, we’re skipping the chance to actually learn about this world.
I don’t know who these characters are or why I should care that they’re doing magical girl shenanigans. And if you’re going to insist that these magical girl shenanigans are so mundane that they’re not worth establishing or explaining...what is the story actually about, then?? If it’s not about exploring wondrous supernatural powers, and it’s not about interesting characters, then it seems like it’s not about anything.

Souls&Fangs @KAOS
-...Why is the second page called ‘Page 4’
-You need better establishing shots...having enemies that turn into dust is nothing new, but drawing a big dark room with two little splotches in the middle of it is not the way to portray this. Not well, anyway.
Make the piles of dust bigger and more person-shaped. Or, cover the room in TONS of dust so that the reader immediately sees something wrong with the scene and wants to know what it is. Or, zoom in on the piles of dust as the character makes his final remarks, to show the reader who he’s addressing. Basically, EMPHASIZE something.
-‘Sir’ is not normally used as an unattached noun by English speakers, just FYI. You might try ‘gentleman’ instead.
=Overall, it’s...fine. Definitely above average from what I’ve seen in this thread (especially the art). And I think the dog is a great way to help endear the reader to the stoic character we’re first introduced to. ^^
My only gripe would be the wooden, unnatural dialogue...I could see it easily dragging the story down; none of the characters feel like they have a consistent voice of their own so far. If you could improve that, though, I could see the story being really entertaining.

Solitary @CloverWrites
-Please don’t tell me that’s AI art on the cover. T_T
-This character says they’re both excited and bored in the same instant…which is it
-“How much boring can this get?” → “How much more boring can this get?” Or maybe, “How boring can this get??”
=Feels like I’m watching anime...unfortunately, I don’t mean that in a good way. =/ Knowledge of anime makes me recognize the conceits, and tells me what to visualize in my head...it helps me understand what you’re trying to do, even with the typos and unnatural dialogue in the way. Without taking that knowledge into account, however, it just looks like a rushed, poorly-formatted string of events featuring an MC who wildly swings between different emotions and moods without any rhyme or reason.
Why does he react so acutely to eating a delicious snack? Because anime characters do that. Why does he immediately rush into a gory death scene three short paragraphs later? Because in anime there are visuals to smooth out those transitions, you’re not supposed to have to ‘write’ them...
Nevertheless, this is not anime; this is a novel. Prose. You have to work within the conventions of the medium you actually have, otherwise you end up with stuff like this: a story that’s maybe cute, but difficult to invest in and impossible to take seriously.

Fine China and Glass Walls @phantasmalart
-I LOVE the synopsis. ^^ I think it’s the best one I’ve read in this whole thread...
-The sideways sections are super annoying...I don’t really know why you do that; is it just because you want to do double-page spreads within Tapas’ size restrictions? Because tbh I’d rather you didn’t bother...even if I were reading on a phone, I don’t think I would enjoy having to flip it around at random intervals. And to be even more honest, I don’t see anything in those panels that needs that much space. =/
=I don’t have anything to say about the story; there’s just not enough happening. What I will say is that it feels like this comic has a heavy emphasis on visuals for that active, ‘adventurous’ feel (as expected from a story about borrowers), BUT...the visuals themselves are unfortunately not strong enough to make it work. The establishing shots are poor, and there’s no sense of 3D perspective, which makes it difficult to tell how big or small anything is-- a very unfortunate weakness for this kind of setting. Like, kind of a death blow, actually. =(
Also, when it comes to tiny people living in a big world, one thing you have to keep in mind is that the props the tiny people use ALSO need to look like they are from a big world. Have them make grappling hooks out of paperclips, have them drink out of thimbles; all that good stuff.
To give a specific example: if they are wearing doll clothes, show the little velcro straps and oversized buttons that doll clothes actually have (because they’re designed to be manipulated by big people). Otherwise, show the oversized, gaping stitches that would result from tiny people trying to use big thread to sew their tiny clothes. It feels immersion-breaking to watch a borrower sneak around trying to take things while seemingly wearing a perfectly miniaturized contemporary T-shirt and jeans.
...Also, I highly doubt a miniature dollhouse plate (even if it was actually real china) would shatter upon being dropped from the inch or two that makes up this borrower’s standing height. And even if it did, it would probably break into just 2 or 3 relatively large pieces...remember, it’s from a big world.

morganicfoods 2024-08-18 21:05:00 UTC #365

Wow I'm... honestly a little disappointed. You're doing this for free so idk what I expected lol
Lowkey kinda was hoping for the deeper dives you've provided to other people tho. Alas.
(I think I'm just nostalgic for when I was on deviantart and getting large swaths of paragraphs analyzing and critiquing my webcomic from my internet friends. Those were the days... ;w; todd and brendan shout out i miss u )

Kudos to you for being one of the few people not distracted by the pretty colours in the background and shading. Although it's kind of a self fulfilling prophecy, most people who wouldn't appreciate the art don't even give it the time of day. Still, I'm shocked that you're one of the first people to say this.

Finally, another person to back me up on the Light Rising B tier webcomic joke I make.

You learn a whole lot from that convo! I could write a giant list! It's just done in a way that doesn't seem like it. I'm what I call a "show don't tell" extremist and I hate how much information is directly given in that scene, even if there was a lot of indirect info too. Personally, I love just being dropped into stories knowing jackshit and having to piece it together. It's just like real life!

If I had to guess, this is you taking issue with the pacing. I'm well aware my pacing is divisive, specifically for webcomics. I've had people say they love my pacing and people say it was my weak point. Therefore, I would not recommend you reading more of my comic if you take issue with my pacing.

Hmmm. Wrong pronoun there. It should be "like I could be using this time for better things." My time's not being wasted. The time of comic is not being wasted. Just yours. :3

A lot of these critisms are things I anticipated people taking issue with and then decided to still keep it in despite. Which is a shame, I'm sure there are so many things you can critique that I've completely not thought about. Or even getting more specific into the art critique. I love a good art critique, it's quite literally how I learned to draw XD

But you can just ignore all this, I don't mind, I'm just being me.
Thanks for taking the time to read and review the first few pages! <3

tealeaf1619 2024-08-18 22:51:32 UTC #366

Genre: Fantasy Adventure
Update: Every other day

Three siblings find themselves swept in a storm and taken to another world called Malkuth. Jack is declared a Hero, and told to climb Towers and find their cores. Jill is stuck in a tower and to escape must climb to the very top. But can she make it before her illness kills her? Jewel, the youngest, meets a person whose goal is to get a powerful artifact inside a tower to prove their worth. Join in their journies to discover the secrets held in Malkuth about the towers, miasma, and the Swepts.

DokiDokiTsuna 2024-08-18 23:13:38 UTC #367

Hey, so...putting a cute emoticon at the end of a sentence doesn't automatically make it sound cute and harmless...sometimes it does the exact opposite, even...just a little internet etiquette FYI...

Anyway, I feel like I need to clarify this point specifically-- believe it or not, I didn't use the wrong pronoun in the sentence that I came up with to express my own thoughts. It was the correct one; I was talking about you. The writer.

As writers, it is 100% possible for us to be wasting our time while telling a story, and one of the skills you learn when you start editing your work is to find those time-wasting moments and get rid of them. If a moment in your story is unnecessarily repetitive, takes too long to get to its own point, or dilutes the emotional energy you tried to put into the scene, it's probably wasting time. And it's probably a better idea to rewrite the moment to make it more succinct, so that the parts you want to emphasize don't get lost in a lot of unimportant fluff.

Now, if you don't agree that you were wasting your time at that moment, that's fine. It's a subjective thing, which usually depends on how much the reader is being entertained by the scene, no matter how long it is.
But you should be aware that it IS a thing that can happen-- it's not just a meaningless slip of the tongue; it's a genuine criticism. Like any other activity, writing can be less effective if it takes too long to complete its objectives.

...I guess??? I'm not exactly sure what this is supposed to mean...it feels like another passive-aggressive retort, tbh...

I will say that I've been there; we all make risky moves in writing from time to time. But if you anticipate that many readers won't like something and you leave it in and someone tells you they don't like it...you kinda have to live with that. Even if they dislike it enough to lose interest and stop reading. Sometimes when you gamble, you lose. =/

I wish I could have said more about your work too; that's the fun part of doing this thread. But I'm not going to talk when I have nothing to say, and your work unfortunately just didn't inspire me. There weren't any horrible errors that I felt the need to dissect, or any interesting choices for me to think deeply about...like I said, it was just OK.

Now if you really wanted me to explain more of my thoughts on your work or to elaborate on the few things that I did say, you could have just...asked me. '_' Other people in this thread have, and I've never minded answering their questions.

This thing where you oh-so-subtly re-critique my critique (which, as I've had to explain before, is less of a critique and more of a first impression) is not the same...on the contrary, it gives me the impression that you don't actually want me looking at your work anymore, despite repeatedly implying that I didn't say enough and should have gone more in-depth. Like, it can't be both...at this point, even if you did ask me for more feedback, I wouldn't feel like I could trust that request.

morganicfoods 2024-08-18 23:47:48 UTC #368

Woah woah woah woah! All my comments were in good nature! There's no need to read between the lines here.

You wrote a review, I'm allowed to share my thoughts on that review!
Question: Are you ok? I guess after doing this for a while you've probably gotten your fair share of defensive/abrasive comments after your mini reviews, so it's not a hard jump to assume I'm the same. I should've taken that into account writing my reply. Sorry. Nothing was supposed to be passive agressive.

I'm sorry if I upset you. I have zero negative feelings towards you, hope you know that.

finleydeandre 2024-08-19 04:37:40 UTC #369

Have a daily comic strip called The Experiment check it out, subscribe let me know if you like it or if you don't either way is cool with me. The Experiment

DokiDokiTsuna 2024-08-19 11:48:26 UTC #370

It's true that I've gotten some...unfortunate replies over the years (and I thank you for understanding)...but I must say it is genuinely shocking to me that you meant for all that to sound totally innocent. O_O Like...it's a little concerning...

I guess all the ambivalence is easier to understand now, but in particular that "you can just ignore all this" bit was the first red flag-- let's be for real, no one types that much AND quotes the person they're talking to (which automatically flags them to your reply) without wanting to be noticed; it sounds disingenuous in any context.
People are less likely to trust you when you try to backtrack like that; it makes you sound like you want to express your feelings while sweetly discouraging the person you're talking to from expressing theirs in return. That's what passive-aggressive means.

And the "wrong pronoun" bit where you confidently recontextualize my own words in an attempt to 'correct' them (while being completely wrong, by the way)...I'm sorry, but I don't know of a charitable way to read that. =/ I can see how your intentions might not be malicious, but it's still not a nice way to talk to people.
At the very least, I don't think you should do things like that in the future...if you disagree with someone, then just disagree; don't talk down to them and tell them what they "meant".

KennethLopezJr921 2024-08-19 13:28:47 UTC #371

I cant remember if I posted my comic here but here's Crescent Blue anyway!

Leyelle 2024-08-19 18:26:32 UTC #372

I'm not sure I've posted here, so either one of my novels works for me if you're interested

This is romance:

this is action fantasy:

+react please xd

morganicfoods 2024-08-19 20:27:15 UTC #373

This is a comment explaining the reasoning behind my words.

It wasn't entirely meant for you. Therefore, you could ignore it and I wouldn't mind.
This is a very active forum, in fact, from what I see it's been alive for about 3 and half years. This is a forum for reviewing/reacting to people's stories upon their request, and so people learning how to write/draw may view this forum to learn. It's much more useful to get both the viewer and the writer's perspective, rather than just the viewer's. I know for a fact that I've read through review forums like these looking to learn, and I know I'm not alone. So I've tried to include a little bit why I did what I did, why I think you took issue with it, but the way I write/speak/respond occasionally doesn't fly well with other people. _(ت)_/

I tend to approach things at a sarcastic and silly angle, that's just my nature, but I'm more than happy to walk it back if the person misunderstands. Re-read my comment as someone being self-deprecating, but in a light-hearted manner. Essentially, I want to commit to the bit, but feel too bad when it actually upsets people.

I know this kinda seems like a weird mix of ideas, or like maybe one of those people who insults you but then backtracks into "iT wAs jUst a jOke," but I can and will assure you that I am currently under your floorboards and eating them like the little sexy wood termite that I am. Isn't that just quirky?

twelvescrolls 2024-08-19 20:52:18 UTC #374

I guess react to this story.

Hoku_1 2024-08-19 20:53:36 UTC #375

Hi, guys check this out if you like gender benders, isekai, and tower climbing stories

The Blind Courtesan

Sypnosis:
This isn’t a tale about heroes—it’s about survival, sacrifice, strategy, and the thin line between justice and madness.

Jun, a loner who values money and games, found himself trapped within a novel in the body of a blind courtesan. A Novel called, ‘The Regressor’s War’, a Murim world where the Constellations and the Towers had taken over, where the dark forces lurked holding secrets that could change everything

Jun couldn’t care less about the Regressor however the Tower wasn’t going just to let him be. The Tower assigned him an impossible mission, ensuring Jun didn’t let the Regressor die and guided him through everything. Jun ensured the Regressor survived through any means necessary, even if he had to sacrifice himself…

When Jun realizes he’s the only one who knows the future of this world, he utilizes the knowledge to make sure he and the Regressor survive the Towers. Using his strategies and foresight Jun overcomes his enemies and hidden plots. As he delved deeper into the Tower, Jun discovered his fate had long been decided before he was born.

Chapter 6, is out now!

iamanerd 2024-08-26 23:39:18 UTC #376

Hello! Please check out mine and share with your friends! This is a web novel in progress! I am happy to hear any feedback!

If you like romance, LGBTQ+ representation (that is actually positive), and potential mystery then please check out The Game We Play.

Synopsis: In the opulent world of Akamore, Princess Margo faces a daunting task: choosing a spouse from three eligible princes. But the decision is far from simple, as political alliances, personal desires, and hidden agendas complicate the game of love.

Told from the perspective of Suki, Margo's devoted maid and friend, this captivating story delves into the complexities of duty, friendship, and the sacrifices made in the pursuit of true love.