I read the first chapter of Terres and I think you did a good job of pulling people into the story. You began with action that builds a lot of intrigue without being confusing, plus you slowly feed the reader tidbits of worldbuilding throughout the chapter. I found myself asking questions about the world and characters while reading (which is good!)
I also liked how you described things, however I felt like you overused metaphors during certain parts. I counted 5 in the first few paragraphs of the chapter and in my opinion they hurt the flow. The metaphors you use ("like a snake", "like she had some sort of grand secret") are creative and I like your choice of words, but they'd hit harder if you used them more sparingly.
Here's my story BTW. It's an action fantasy series with mystery, horror, and mythology influences.
