Working on a review for the one above, will post before the end of the day! (I just don't want to write up a whole thing and then have someone get to it first haha)
The descriptions are visually appealing and evocative! The language used paints a solid picture.
The variety of words used is fitting diction for the setting! It blends nicely with the fantasy aspects!
“…framed by a network of gentle crows feet.” Is really nice!
This is partially style, so this isn’t true all of the time, but I see it a little bit: there is a noticeable lack of simple words for things in favor of adjacent synonyms.
Ex: using queried instead of asked. “Asked” and “said” are kind of like invisible words. The reader won't notice them. While writing it can feel like you’re over using these simple words but in reality they’re not even really registered by the reader. When you use “queried” instead of “asked” it's much more noticeable and usually is a que for the reader to pay attention and look for why it was used instead. (To point out an odd question, suspicion, other connotations derived from the context).
I dislike prologues in general, specifically because they are almost always misused. So I have a little bias here haha.
This prologue (all parts of it considered) is exceedingly too long. Outside of the sheer length it’s more of an introduction/first chapter than a prologue.
“A prologue is a supplemental written piece (shorter than a chapter), at the beginning of a book that gives us a blink into the new world we are about to enter. It doesn’t have to be in sync with the timeline and should generate curiosity and elicit engagement.”
I would recommend this article for anyone who is considering writing a prologue. It’s short and to the point:
The setting is engaging! I like the moth pets/spirit guides (they loosely remind me of the deamons from The Golden Compass). It's very cute that it opens with the main character having a crush on a baker!
I'm honestly not feeling it with my elevator pitch but I've looked at it for too long:
Promiscuity had always been a source of pride among the elven men in Yinric’s tribe. As one of the half-elven bastards, he considered himself both often and lucky. Until a one night stand brewed into more. Not only is she pregnant, but they've both been excommunicated.