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I read ur episodes till the one called "English", I won't lie but none of them made me laugh,
So for me I think u should improve comedy and face expressions, but the artstyle is cool I have no problem with it
but what attracted me is that episode " English "

So I just wanna know, were you making fun of arabic because the character said
(تحدثوا مثل هاذا )
Which literally means ( they spoke like that )

I hope you explain ur point because I didn't get

And here's my novel

● Name: Age of Magic

● Genre: Fantasy, Action, Mystery, Magic

● Summary:
500 years ago, people believed that a great earthquake divided a huge continent into three ones . These three lived in peace until the day when a village got destroyed leaving one survivor. A boy named Leo, but little did he know of the adventure that awaited him.

● Why should you read it ?
Hmmm, If you like elves and demons or dragons, it's gonna be here, if you wanna see the journey of boy who lost everything and wants to get stronger in order to get his revenge, it's also gonna be here, if you like magical stuff, and how it works ( There're available episodes that explain magic how it works " The origin of magic " check them out if you wanna know how, and let me know ur opinion about it )

● Hopefully you check it out

There you go!

Also- I have questions. Why is this a webtoon link? Why... like.... I don't want to spoil the prologue but why? Lol. To create more of an impact though, I would make it longer. It read very quickly.

Okay will do thanks so much!!! And I still need to update it in tapas 😅

Whatever happened to giving me a warm welcome a few days ago? Also I DID read a comic from my FRIEND, Discounted Artists, and his COMICAL series, DISCOUNTED Comics.
(Edit: And once again, it WAS funny)

You were supposed to put a sentence about it in the comment with the link, I read it too and I still did it.

To write an paragraph about my long experience Ocean was a good pun (already read it). Weight loss had a great punchline and expressions (already read it). Question was a new art style, and pretty sad to see blue dude go in corner (already read). However, I didn't get the speeding ticket (already read). Attitude was freaking hilarious, also it had a good-looking cake art style . 凸( •̀_•́ )凸

I said sentence not paragraph, there are six sentences in a paragraph. (And I'm sorry about being rude earlier, I'm still mad at you for something admittedly petty on my end for a few days)

YOLO SWAG 凸( •̀•́ )凸 凸( •̀•́ )凸 凸( •̀_•́ )凸... Don't know...

I wasn't making fun of Arabic. I searched up languages made before English and Arabic was one of them. I put "they spoke like this" int ogoogle translate and put it in the comic, because the joke was supposed to be that the MC somehow knew Arabic. At least, I think that was what I was going for, I made it last month.

Also, thanks for the feedback. Now that I think about it, improving my facial expression would be great because a lot of the comics have reactions in them.

Aah I got ur point, I just want to tell you that you wrote arabic from the other side like English alphabets, but arabic is written from the right to left, and it's written with fusion letters not separated ones just I wrote up there in the reply .
just a piece of information .
And I think I'll keep on reading ur work because I find it cool :smiley: and thanks

Y2F

@youu2sef I like that the format is that of a play script, but I feel like the plot is too fantasy generic.
I am at the first few chapters, though so my opinion will most likely change as I read further on.

And this is my work:

I like the set up to give people a bias towards the character before the whole thing kicks off. Very typical murder mystery thing that always works for that genre.

It's called Wandering the World. Idk if this is just for comics or both, but it's up as both a novel and comic. The novel is way farther along. The comic only has like a page or 2 up, but I would love if you checked either out either way. :grin:
Novel Link:
https://tapas.io/series/Wandering-the-World

Comic Link:
https://tapas.io/series/Wandering-the-World-Comic-Book-Preview2

The year is 2028 it's been 9 years since the Great War that saw most of the world nuked. A world government has now been set up to prevent anymore wars. After a tragic event Stan is seeking revenge, but against who? Find out more about this crazy world with Stan and his two homies, Dariűse, and Quiet. Who have their own beefs with this crazy world they live in.
(Sorry for the way it's written this will eventually be a comic book. This is just the written out version.)

I really like how your painting the picture, I feel like I can visualize everything really well. Liking the character a lot so far as well!!

Just one thing, in the prologue I did notice in the sentence "He was told that he is tall for his age" you accidentally wrote "He was told that he is told for his age" Just wanted to let you know :slight_smile:

This one is mine. Slice of life/comedy about a Panda who moved to Canada to open his dream bar. Makes friends with a Moose, Beaver, and a cow and they go on adventures.

What are you talking about I read someone's comic and left a comment about it.

First I thank you for checking out my novel :smile:
And second, you said it's too much fantasy, I don't quite understand, every fantasy work should have its own world and superpowers...
And third, I took a look on your novel, and I want u to know that the description is awesome I liked it, it helps really to imagine what's going on, and another thing, which is some writings errors, I know everyone makes mistakes, but it's okay if you check ur work again before updating, and keep on :heart:

Since nobody has given you feedback on your work, I will. I don't know much about action, but I'll do my best at looking at your work.

It's very straightforward. Tells the reader about Stan, which is good. You can tell what's going in the art, which is also good. Stan's wife (whoever she is) is dead in the cover. I don't want to get too emotionally invested in something right now, so I'm not going to sub.

Good comic.

@DiscountedArtist
I read through your comic and I think some your jokes are pretty good. They definitely got a good chuckle out of me here and there. Some of the jokes though went over my head though. I do like how your art style is consistent throughout each of your comics. I think the simple art style complements the delivery of your jokes.

@Gudfish
I read through your comic and found it interesting. I like some of the puns and some of the shorter jokes. I think it would be pretty interesting to explore the relationship between the friends. It would be interesting to see how some of characters would interact with each other outside the presence of the panda, or even with the panda there.

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The webcomic I'm working on is a slice of life/comedy. It's inspired by manga and manga making technique. It's about two friends who want to make a graphic novel together. While they are determined, they often find themselves distracted and off task. I fashioned it similar to a manga and publish a chapter every week. I'm making the story both as a webtoon and as a manga format.

You can read it here https://tapas.io/series/Offtask
or you can read the manga version at my pixiv: https://www.pixiv.net/user/25699043/series/88939

They're the same story, they're just formatted differently.

This seems interesting, I think I'll check it out. I also like the artstyle (I'm not doing this to meet the rules set by OP, I mean that)

Thanks. I was actually hesitant to making a manga/webtoon at first since I was worried that my art style wouldn't be too appealing. Hearing that is reassuring.