Both of your stories have been read, assessed, and listed on Virtual Bookshelf.
@lorddevin2 You chose a pretty popular topic/genre to write about and included your own spin on it with a good, fast pace. However, I believe, overall, you could develop your story more by including more range of thought and emotion of the characters rather than cycling them through various actions and events. Writing-wise, you're quite okay except that you have a lot of run-on sentences or fragments, so unfortunately for that, I had to dock one point off the TQ. I can see your enthusiasm for writing while I was reading the story, so I think it has a lot of potential. If you have further inquires or want more specific feedback, feel free to ask through Discord.
@therosesword Honestly, I wasn't sure whether to read and include this on my website as it falls into the grey zone of what I generally accept. That it is being optioned for a screenplay is no problem as its original form is still a novel. Yet, this story is technically a short story or novella rather than a novel. I don't take less than 30,000 total words, and your story was on the shorter end. This short length affects the typical build up of a world, characters, and events in a longer novel, so both that and the storyline itself unfortunately lent to a lower score than what might be expected. This doesn't mean it was poorly done, just that the standards used to measure don't quite fit it. With that said, I still thought it was pretty unique and wrote about one of the more uncommon types of topics/genres, so despite the short length and flow of content, I decided to include it on Virtual Bookshelf.