Everyone's stories have been read, assessed, and listed on Virtual Bookshelf. Thank you all for sharing these stories!
As small Christmas gifts, I commented a little on each of the following stories. I don't usually do this as it's reserved for Discord only (although deeper in length than this).
Eloisa_go --- I liked the matching-art style thumbnails for the chapters and your analogy of the two boys as raindrops on a window. It would be nice to see the boys "rallying" for support amongst their peers like collecting smaller raindrops on the way to the bottom in a race to see which drops faster to the finish. And with your existing hint, they "clash" preemptively to the bottom somewhere along the way. I simply thought of this due to your analogy, but pay no heed if you don't care for this.
@HMiruko Even though your story is only 5 chapters, you have a strong start with clean language and solid foundations for character and where the plot is going. I do hope you'll continue it!
@surenlicious Good start! All story aspects have solid foundations including the world building which is important for fantasy stories. The cover and thumbnails colors really pop with a unique art style! The pacing of the dialogue and action seem to be well-balanced. Nice fantasy character names too.
@buggeredhip Very cool cover, it gives me some sci-fi or steampunk vibes, though. One note on the first chapter, at the start of one paragraph, it began with "I" when the story is written in third person. Although these are his thoughts I realized later in the paragraph, the construction made it bit jarring as if the narrative switched. So, a small suggestion to reword that sentence with third person pronouns instead. Lastly, your serious writing style/tone fits the mystery and crime genre of this story well. I didn't expect the sensitive topics to come up despite the forewarnings. You handled narrating these well, but back stories did feel somewhat like info-dumps.
@grotesqueice I really liked your banner cover with the definition and the moon. I don't know whether the split in the off center was purposefully or not, but I thought it was a nice touch and added to the vibe. The 9 chapters all felt oddly short since not much happened between them all. The introspective start was solid, but the pacing after that seemed to linger at the same rate. To be fair, this story is just beginning, so it's probably nothing major once you dive deeper in---this is just a remark for now. However, do note that this is reflected in the score. Developing stories that have just begun usually have lower scores until it rises and stabilizes around the 30-40 chapter mark.
@rkgnumber3 Your story is just starting, so I don't have much to work with in terms of scoring properly. As I said above, stories with few chapters have lower scores until they hit the 30-40 chapter mark and stabilize to completion. A few observances were the dialogue and interludes between them were off-balance. The dialogues felt pithy in contrast with the rest of the story narration. Additionally, avoid large info-dumps like in chapter 3 about why Clara was "her own woman." You can reveal her story in bits and pieces and demonstrate her independent character through her actions instead of a backstory in a chunk paragraph.