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Title: The Case of the Whispering Pages Author: @a.g.meade Status: Episode 15 Criticism: It's a mystery and I'm genuinely intrigued, but... With the short episodes, the narrative keeps getting cut off. The story isn't contained within an episode so with nothing much happening within a page, my a…
Finally had time to do some reviews! The return of the stick. Title : Rebirth of the Unrivaled Water Specialist Author : @SurvivALIST Status : Episode 6 Criticism: First things first. Your prologue is skippable. It's entirely exposition so not many readers would care to read it all. This is a …
I was intimidated by the all caps to promote my story here.
Here's mine if you wanna take a gander. 
Don't be in a rush. Before you start publishing, it's better to have a good handle on your story first. Read up on writing. What skills should you learn; do's and don'ts. It won't all stick to memory, but it'll pop up every now and then. Write at least 20,000 words—go over your story once or twice…
Sir, can you review mine as well? Jk xD I salute you for starting one of these as well @chestnutriceeee!
It's been awhile xD. I've gotten busier in real life so lately I've neglected this thread. I'll try to do at least one or two per week.
Title: Centris Author: @Kuma Status: Episode 3 Criticism: I wanted to use someone else's stick but I couldn't find it. There was this one post on reddit about comparing a first chapter to a pickle. I spent an hour looking for it, but unfortunately, couldn't find it. It would've been a good refere…
Title: RDH Author: @CheeseMemes Status:Volume1 Criticism and Compliments: Oh! It felt like a 4-koma manga. The realistic-looking cars looked off though. If you're not planning on drawing them, might I suggest cartoonizing them before adding to the background and blurring? There were a lot of words …
Title: Alpha Edrox Author: @Maxedrox Status:Latest Episode Criticism: Tameaf, run away from the stick! Steady your heart, my friend, this might feel a bit heavy. I'll tell you this in advance. There are some people that don't mind about the issues I'm about to point out. If you want to connect to a…
Oh, I didn't expect that you drew that on your phone. That's amazing in itself. I think adding that little detail in your description would add more charm to your work.
@SurvivALIST @marshmallowsspr Since there's a lot on there to review already, I'll place yours in a pending queue for whenever I get to them. But please read the initial post, as that is how I'll be basing my reviews.
Your welcome! Take your time, most small issues can be solved by going back to read your novel after a few weeks. I'm glad you're enjoying Erden! Thank you as well for reading it!
Title: It's Lovely to see You Author: @Aleus_arts Status:Episode 8 Criticism: It's been awhile, but here comes the stick~ There's not much to comment on since nothing has happened yet, so I'll just state a few things I had in mind. In comics—Manhwa, manhua, or manga—the first thing I notice with…
It's fine if there was a character written for exposition. How successful that character will be depends on how you use him. Take Wuxia for example, most authors make use of third-party characters inserting commentary into a fight to explain how attacks work. It doesn't feel out of place at all—well…
Title: Trial Run Author: @chestnutriceeee Status: Same as the last time Criticism: Right after the "Does this still work" part of your first episode, I suggest you add a reverting timer. Since the descriptions feel a bit lacking to understand what's going on. Maybe, "29 seconds. 28. 27... 16... 3…
Title: Our Sanctuary Author:@IamKeeks Status:Chapter 2 Criticism and Compliments: I'd beat you with a stick, but it might come back to me. What does Starcrost mean? You can put it in your episode description. The direction plot seems to have been established early, however, your art has not. Don't g…
Please do remember to leave a comment on a chapter in my novel at least so I can mark down that you've read it. If you just mention it on this thread, there's a chance I might not see it. (that's not a threat, I literally might not see it due to the increasing number of posts and my brain overheatin…
Title : The 7½ Deaths of Emmeline Holmes Author : @Writenry Status: Three Criticism: I was about to swing the stick but stopped midway. There's some confusion with the initial half of your prose. For example, "At a loss, I return to the last concern of the man I was." Maybe this is an idiom? Stil…
Title : Lucky Charm Author : @KUUPID Notes: It's my first time writing a BL/ LGBTQ+ themed story and I'm not confident of the story's overall flow. I'd like to hear your thoughts about the pacing as well as your opinions on the main character! ^^ (and other things that stand out to you!) Status: Ch…
Alright, since the list has grown quite a bit— anything added past this comment I will consider adding to the queue, but I won't be sure if I'll ever get to it. Just a heads up.
Title : Offshoot Petals Author : @BarBarKetrab Notes: I'd like any kind criticism really, but for the most part, I'd like to know if everything flows well and if events are going too fast or too slow. Also, I'd like to know if you consider my opening to be "boring" or not? Status: Episode 21 Crit…
Phew~ The work is piling up, hahah! I'll go through them throughout the week, and you'll get notified once your review comes out.
Your welcome, and I wish you well on your endeavors! Remember, don't be in a rush. Take your time to mold your comic into the best that you can.
While not as rampant as the first chapter, some of what I said applies to your other chapters. Check Storytelling and Recurring Problem.
Thank you as well! I'm happy to gain a reader! Don't be shy to leave comments, yeah? I'll respond as fast as I can!
Story: An Unwritten History Author: Bluehoodie Status: Episode 11 Criticism: I can't beat you with a stick, I just can't. The story skips a bit, and the dialogue feels blocky. I feel that you could improve more on your pacing and dialogue. For your art, I suggest a bit of practice with drawing bod…
Title : Jinsei: Resonate Author : @Lahin Notes: Please tell me if it's flowing well. And if there are moments that stick out Status: Episode 9 Criticism: Prepare yourself. After the clock strikes four, the second sentence hits me. Long, too long to take in immediately. Which makes it hard to u…