RED - A collection of re-imagined fairy tales

[thischickdoesart]

Hello everyone!

I recently finished a collaborative short comic and uploaded it here to Tapas. I'd appreciate it if you would all read it and leave feedback. The comic is a grand total of 4 PAGES. Yep. 4 paginas. Das it. So, it's an easy read. I had a really good writer to work with so I think the story is worth checking out.

RED :: LIL' RED | Tapas

Thanks!

PS. The pages were orginally posted to my twitter (https://twitter.com/ThisChickDoArt). Let me know if any of you Tapas artists & writers are on twitter, too!

PS. I'm going to attempt some more shorts with fairy tales in mind. That's the reason I have it set as a collection (to add more stories later) I have 2 stories in the works and maybe I'll see if any writers would like to bless me with some of their writing like I was for this one.

[DeformedSunflower]

So first off, interesting concept.
I don't know what caused you to reimagine an old fairytale, but that's very creative. Another excellent point is that you take no time jumping into the mystery, which is perfect for intriguing readers' curiosity.

Secondly, I think you should emphasise more on some scenes.
For instance, I would like to see more of Lil' Red and Mr. Wood's training sequence, the wolf lady stare at Lil' Red as she passes by, and also the dent/pebble on the floor that caused Lil' Red to stumble.
Elaborating on these scenes will help give depth to the story.

Just remember that wide shots are great in describing a scene (7th panel in page 2, 1st-5th panels in page 3 are very well done), while zoomed-in scenes are for more dramatic shots (I would like to see more scenes like that of panel 3 in page 2).

I think your comic looks very promising so far, and I can't wait to know more about the history of Lil' Red's family.

[thischickdoesart]

Thanks for taking the time to read it, @kirschwassen! So first, let me explain that this was originally for a challenge on a reddit comic collab forum. The requirements called for the entry to be based on a public domain fairy tale and exactly 4 pages. There lies the challenge for a writer to create a script with fewer pages than that, and the artist to be efficient in how to present it. And trust me, it wasn’t easy, lol!

I usually do “mini boards”, thumbnail sketches really, of the panels and after attempting to collage them together per page, wind up jettisoning half or consolidating particular shots. I think those points you mentioned would be great to add if we were allowed more pages but our priority was getting Lil’ Red from point A to B and satisfying Red’s curiosity regarding what her mother gave her to deliver.

I’ve grown fond of the character of Lil’ Red so I have been considering a continuation.

Thanks again!

[NanettesClouds]

Hey welcome back! I'm excited to check these out your one-page comics from last year were rad

[thischickdoesart]

Thanks, @niah146 ! I actually have more of those one page comics that I need to get past the script stage, lol. Stay tuned!