Ladies and gentlemen, prepare to witness true entertainment.
Now that I've had some further examination, there's so many damn problems... Prepare for a proper roasting, HERETIC!
CHAPTER 1:
* Stanley is described as a 'nice dude' at first, but the more I read of him the more he drifts away from that and towards acting like a petulant (and slightly stupid) asshole. Of course, since you're the god of this world of yours, this is factual evidence that he is straying further and further from God every day.
* Apparently high tech research facilities trying to discover the formula for magic superpowers still use fax machines. I wonder what kind of thorough research led you to discover that.
* Some goddamned scientist the main character is where she can't be asked to remember the name of the HIGHLY EXOTIC SPECIMEN they dragged in just so she could create her big break for the company, something which is clearly important to her.
* The fight scene had no sense of distance whatsoever. You mean to tell me two of them were close enough for her to slap both of them without having to dart between them? Does she have another superpower we aren't being told of?
CHAPTER 2:
* Stanley further irons out his dumbass credentials by refusing to understand she has ice powers. He didn't stagger up from the chair like he was surprised at all when she stomped, so that tells me she already showed him beforehand and he whines about still not being able to understand. Whether this(and bothering to flip through the comic to narrate to her what he already said) is a sign of being a petulant asshole or straight up dumbassery or both, I can't tell.
* I know this might be part of the fun, but Stanley's insistence on her becoming a superhero only builds on my headcanon that he's just an emotionally manipulative, egotistical asshole with a subtle sense of unearned moral superiority.
* Some scientist our protagonist is, that she needs help from Stanley of all people to figure out how exactly she got ice powers. Maybe the experimental serum you made yourself had something to do with it, woman!
* Maybe I missed the memo, but why is the scrapyard empty in winter? I don't think that's supposed to be standard protocol... Actually, are you telling me they also leave the unattended scrapyard's shed unlocked so some random scientist can use their blowtorch to weld ice skates to her rubber-soled shoes?
* Now, realistically Stanley being frozen solid would kill him via suffocation or hypothermia, and honestly I wouldn't have minded if he did actually die then. It would add some emotional weight to the whole thing. I liked the part where she said "You saw nothing" to the bystanders though, that got a laugh out of me.
CHAPTER 3:
- Not sure how kicking off skates would have enough force to impale a wood dresser, but okay.
- Shockingly enough, this episode isn't as much of a disaster aside from that. But I can tell you're trying to hint at a possible future romance that I have very, very bad impressions about.
The interlude was also nice. But now for the GRAND FINALE: I'M BETTER AT THIS THAN YOU AND I'M GOING TO PROVE IT!
Back in chapter 2, we get the basics of Stanley's backstory: His rich-ass parents wanted him to be a lawyer/doctor/businessman/etc and were controlling about it. So Stanley went rebellious on them and ran away once he finished high school, making a big show about how he would only be known for his own merits and not his family name. Now, let's set aside the obvious problems of the required fake ID, SSN(or in-universe equivalent) and possibly plastic surgery depending on tech level he'd need to resist even the most baseline-level efforts his parents could've made to find him and focus on that particular stated reason why he ran away.
This pains me, because this backstory would infer that Stanley's some sort of self-reliant determinator tryhard that is the exact opposite of a slacker(And he's definitely a slacker). That initial interpretation would've actually made five times more sense if applied to Irelia. Think about it, we know she's hellbent on glory already and doesn't really care that much about the true art or doing things the particularly hard way, and her leaving would have already established her as self-centered (which she definitely is), so it would make perfect sense. The backstory's good, you just applied it to the wrong character.
I also found it awkward, while we're in the ballpark, about how you tried to paint Stanley as this sort of mentor archetype almost unwittingly, despite them being the same age. I just feel like some of this story would've made more sense if Stanley was just a fair bit older than Irelia in a rewrite, but that's just me.
Try seriously taking a step back to think when you write, maybe that'll buff out some of the massive volumes of scuffing that this story has.
For those of you still in doubt about Stanley's moral character, let me take a quote out of context:
"Stanley, you goddamn hussy! Get the hell off of me!"
"Not until you agree to give me a chance, Ire!"
