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Dec 2020

I made this short comic recently, but I don't know if to finish the artwork yet.

The comic it's about a woman that loses her arm and her husband after an incident. She's now under the care of the daughter of an enigmatic doctor with a peculiar method of healing.
The doctor basically replaces ill or even dead people with identical copies of themselves. I based loosely the aesthetic for that on the legend of the golem

My most prevalent problems while making comics are: bad grammar and spelling, slow pacing, and overly large sequences that serve no purpose.
I'm trying to make shorter stories to experiment and learn more about writing, as I don't consider myself good at writing fiction.
If you're familiar with my previous work you might found similarities in theme.

What do you think about it?
I hope that at least you can have a good laugh while reading my cringy comic.

Notes:
1. This is kind of my "thumbnail phase" so the art it's pretty rough and the space between panels it's too short.
2. I forget constantly which is arm is the one that the protagonist has lost.
3. Again, my English it's pretty bad. I'm currently taking classes but they don't teach me how to make natural dialogue. I'm open to suggestions on how to improve.

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For the record, your English is pretty good already, even if there are some awkward sentences. If making grammar mistakes is your hang up here, I’d suggest getting someone who’s fluent in English to read over your work and help you revise your dialogue.

I’m a little confused about what’s going on from what you showed here, but I get the feeling you left out some context on purpose. I think you should keep going!

That could help a lot! Thanks!

Maybe I should develop this idea a little bit more and make clearer some aspects.
Like who are these characters and how they got into this situation.