Show your original comic!

[Kyosu]

I start with mine.

here the link of my comic One of Us

Eria is a wild planet where the sentient beings called Ka'turian live in harmony with the nature in tribal society upon the trees. Their society doesn't have rules but everybody help each other and, once 3 moon cycles (1 year), they travel to the Tree of Life to trade with other tribes.

After many years of travelling, Na'hiraakin returns to his homeworld in order to find some peace and to live with his beloved mate Ma'si....

[Shiori_Saku]

Star Watcher

The story of a lonely puppy whose life takes a dramatic turn when he meets a fallen star. Star Watcher follows the journey and adventures of these two unlikely companions as they seek a way to return the star to her home in the night sky.

[Shiori_Saku]

ONE OF US : REVIEW

I like the concept of "One of Us." There is just something so appealing about life on an alien planet. The characters thus far are intriguing and the worlds visual building is creative and fun. I really like the physical design of the tribes-people. It's pretty obvious that the main character is from a different tribe and his mate and her kin. There are several jarring issues I encountered while reading the available pages, not all of these are dire or even truly prominent but as a creator myself I found them unsettling.

The colors are bright and interesting but there is little contrast in the size of the line art used. This makes it hard to pick out foreground objects or characters from background elements. The shading also varies in type and style. Where in one panel the shading is soft and graded into the base colors there is another panel that has harsher highlighting and shading with very little, if any, bluing or gradation.

The text bubbles and interior text are a good size for reading but some of the text doesn't look like it fits well in its designated bubble either by leaving a lot of unused space or very little space to give the bubble a crowded feel.

The story jumps a bit without any clear transition from the actions of one character to another set of characters and there is little clear introduction to the characters we have encountered. I find myself wondering what significance the markings on each character is and how these clans and tribes are structured. I wouldn't know that they even lived in tribal societies or that they lived in trees except that I've read the description. I feel that the world at large and the characters could use a more through fleshing out.

STARS: 3 out of 5
REMARKS: Promising and intriguing, I may lurk a little longer before subscribing.

[TrustyShamrock]

HI! well first of all i gotta say right from the start i 100% care about mutt. hes sooo cute and cute dogs are the bomb. on the flip side tho im not really into animal stories MYSELF so that kinda turned me off. but it didnt take away from the cuteness of mutt. but another thing is that it kinda jumps into quest-mode pretty fast and doesnt give a lot of reason to care about why lintie should be back in the sky. besides that shes a star and she tripped (haha) and in the sky is just where she should be
i think the animal art is ALL spot on. its so great and detailed. A+. especially some of these poses and expressions ya got going on. like when mutt fell down the crater had some really great poses. but the backround and human(ish) art seems a wee bit less good. it seems kinda rushed and doesnt have as much detail as everything else
you have good comic booking skills too. the timing between panels and stuff works really good and you start a scene really smoothly
i dont like the fonts ya use too much. the sound effects one seems kinda plain and the talkin one doesnt really fit the art style too much and doesnt have a very comic-booky vibe. i think a thinner handwriting lookin font would be good for it
lets see what else what else. i made a ton of notes so im tryin to figure out how to put them together
i really like linties name. for some reason it works perfectly for a star character. i cant figure out why but it does. i also like the ways she talks like how she said "gone out" instead of "died". and how shes excited to see the animals and stuff. star things like that are just cute
it bums me out how everyone treats mutt. but ike in a good way. it makes the story interesting. and it ended on a good cliffhanger

SO i give it 6/10 linties! i think it needs a few tweaks and maybe its not far enough in the story to get me hooked yet. but its really cute and i like the characters

[TrustyShamrock]

heres my comic!

Robo Hole

a scifi/comedy about a black hole thats turned into a boy who crashlands into an earth suburb called Freefar. there he meets a grumpy girl named Parsnip who gets dragged into his life of fighting robots, alternate universes, and surviving the suburbs

[Aspie_Gamer]

Life of an Aspie

Life of an Aspie follows the everyday life of Susan Graham, a teenaged American girl with Asperger's Syndrome living in Japan with her grandmother who runs a boarding school.

Eager for a fresh start, she can't wait to start attending Fukuzawa High until she gets accidentally humiliated by a popular ladies man named Takeshi.

Vowing to swear off men during her high school years, Susan is determined to keep to this goal...so long as her asperger's lets her.

[Waterdrain]

Heyo! I know currently I don't have that much to go on with the comic that I have on tapastic but it would be really awesome if someone critiqued my other comic Hobo story

It's about a girl who ends up on a different planet and she has to find her way back home by finding the mystical "Arc" that can take her anywhere she needs to go. It's kind of a wizard of oz themed story but with a twist.

[Kayke]

As far as design stuff, your word bubbles are kind of strange. It seems like you change the font size to get the type to fit into the bubbles, where font size should really only be changed as emphasis (like bolding when someone is shouting) not just to squeeze more dialog into a small space. Also, your panels and word bubbles have some issues with how they are arranges that make the comic hard to read and took me out of the story because I had to stop and figure out what came next. Here are two specific examples:

Page 6 I wasn't sure where to go when I got the the panel that said "I like it"... I realized after reading the dialog that you wanted me to read the panel below it next, but our eyes naturally want to flow from left to right, as that's how we read text.

Page 8 In the second panel I believe we're meant to read the bubble that starts "tell me" first, but my eyes immediately went to the one that says "I don't know" since it is so much higher up on the page. This page also has a lot of examples of the font size changing arbitrarily.

As for the story, I don't really feel like there's enough of it up to give you a valid assessment. I'm still trying to get a feel for who the characters are and how they interact with each other as well as how the world they live in functions. It's a lot to take in and I don't think 10 pages is enough for me to get a solid footing just yet.

I say keep it up though, I think it has potential!

[samuraiotaku]

Mine is a story about 2 boys and a oni(japanese ogre) girl traveling Japan in order to achieve their dreams but I haven't gotten far enough into the story yet lol. Very Shounen (japanese boys comic) influenced.

It's my first time writing a story so the pacing and dialogue could use work (^^;;)
I would really love it if you guys gave me your opinions on it and constructive criticism.
Nitou-Ryu

[kazukitakamura126]

The comic I am advertsing here is a parody of my comic Seishin Patona entitled Seishin Patona Parade.

I can tell the main three will be a interesting cast of characters. You have your two competitive characters and a shy and somber character who can act like the group's mediator. I like how you wasted no time on getting the action started but that guy was knocked way too quickly. The environment looks a little to plain and lacks depth. Adding a few bushes and rocks could help the environment less empty. The characters anatomy seems a little off, the heads are big and the collar bone is too low.

If those things are fixed I am sure this will become a great comic.

[gabmonastrial]

Hi everyone! I'm a newbie artist and this the comic I started a month ago , hope you check it out: http://m.tapastic.com/series/Nico-Must-Hate-The-World

[MagicDolphin]

Genres: Dark Fantasy/ Drama

I'm a beginner at using computer and this kind of stuff to draw

this is a tribute to Tommy Cooper and has nothing to do with the actual story,

most of the episodes don't , the story is fluctuating, most of the episodes are independent but they tend to connect.

http://tapastic.com/episode/191352

my critic to gabmonastrial comic: i lol'd and sincerely like this kind of comic, it doesn't make me want to subscribe yet, but i feel it's potential.

[Mineu]

@MagicDolphin: my critique to your comic: well, I like your comic a lot, more specially the first pages. It's really interesting how you are able to tell a story with practically not much text. Also I have to say I really like your style of inking, I find it pretty expressive (it really makes you feel anxious or scared or surprised).
The only complain I have is that I find it pretty confusing that you have many shorts and stories mixed up.

Well, this is my comic: http://tapastic.com/series/Tsukiko-the-moon-childs-wish
It's a story set in the 1910 times in a fictional country named: Solely. It tells the story of Tsukiko, a star that once fell from the sky as a shooting star and her journey to return to Heavens

[Tanisha]

I really like the idea and characters so far! I also love your paneling for a lot of pages as I am always looking for different ways to panel in my mangas.v All I can say though is that I feel like the black on the linework should be darker?..Like when you scan the page, up the levels a bit so it's more of a pitch black rather than a paleish almost black. A little nitpicky there and it might just be my laptop screen making it look not as dark to me xDD so it's whatever~c;

My manga is Model Student which is a shoujo romance story that is a about a girl that is going to school to become a model like her mother!~^^/

[Alpacassei]

Here's my comic Angles + Deamuns (tapastic) (tumblr) It's main site is tumblr so there's more art and info posted there than here sorry ono

It's short comics about Felix the guardian angel, his archangel boyfriend Cassiel, his human Elena, and their friends.

I promise that I'll critique some of your comics later, I'm super tired right now sorry ono

[Mineu]

Thank you so much for your comment! I'll fix it
By the way, your comic is really cute!!

[Tanisha]

You're welcome ! And thank you so much and thanks for subscribing!~^^b

[Kriamhurt]

Mad Dog

A retired soldier, after a traumatic incident, decided to start anew in a far away unknown town. He told nothing to his friends, so to the world, he's a dead man. He spends his days in the town's pub reminiscing about his adventures.

[gnekomikero]

BOMB A
Joji is a bomber and he likes to "boom". Follow the story of a young boy who wants to explode... I mean explore the world to find the great historical artifact "the great BOX".

[GAIJINcomics]

@gnekomikero i love how you draw the characters expressions and the backgrounds, well done!

Here is my manga Death ward --> http://tapastic.com/episode/280691

Aidan is, in many ways an average office worker... except that his office resides in the underworld, and his job description is banishing lost and corrupt souls, and his boss is a grumpy grim reaper! What's so difficult about that right? Well pretty much everything.

Get ready for a story full of action, drama and comedy with a dash of black humor!