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Jan 5

So since two years ago I have been writing this book but I suddenly lost interest in it and decided to let my dad read it
He said I diverted from the original story line which was adventure and leaned towards romance and in some places i either have to much detail or close to none so I came here for a little advice

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Even popular stories divert. Look at lookism. Went from life of fat ugly incel who became Chad to gangsta style Naruto without the super powers except exaggerated real martial arts.

DBZ also diverted from adventure to find the 7 magic dragon balls to nothing but fighting and powering up. :laughing:

So don't sweat too much about diversion from original plot. Happens all the time

It depends on the genre. One of my biggest mistakes throughout all my writing was not doing enough editing for grammar and spelling mistakes. Regarding the writing craft itself, my two biggest mistakes when I started writing my novel was making the pacing too slow (thus killing interest/momentum in the plot before things got exciting) and not describing people and expressions enough. Weirdly, I described settings a lot, but not the people lol

When I draw manga, I make sure to focus on just one topic per episode.
Since my thoughts tend to scatter, I have a habit of cramming two or three topics into a single conversation.
I’m careful to avoid that in my manga.

I never watched Naruto so I don’t know how to respond to that
But still thanks for sharing

ahhh, YESSS. me pretending I remember what a comma splice is.

I do that when I write essays for school
I insert commas but never use periods

I LIKE commas. :grin: When I was in school, IIRC, commas in text could be interpreted to mean minor pauses, instead of using ellipses. Does that ring a bell with anyone?

I did some more homework on this. I think I'm guilty of it more than I realized. But this site seemed pretty easy to digest, so I thought I'd share it here (if outside links are okay).

I once shared it with a teacher and she mentioned that the dialogue was too proper. It was like I was writing a paper not two people talking two each other. I've tried to be aware of that in all my future works.

oof sammmme

or rather as I would usually write it; yes I do the same, I occasionally find myself falling into that same trap due to my tendency to get lost in writing the minute descriptions of the scenes I imagine at the expense of pacing and clarity

lol

@nene
that i wrote a grand adventure with so many characters, plots, places on my first manga, should have started small lol now im in too deep hehe :yum:

Introducing too many characters at once :sweat_smile: Some novels/comics can get away with it but I sure can't lol. Nowadays I try to give each new character a fair amount of screen time, and use their name a lot, before introducing the next one.