Interesting story! I read all four of your current episodes, and I actually found it pretty fun, even though apocalypse stuff isn't usually my thing. Here are some things that stuck out to me!
Pros:
- Chapters are a good length and seem to serve their purposes pretty well.
- The statistics/information bits are a fun concept.
- You're very good at describing environments. I would actually like to see more time devoted to establishing setting; I can tell you have a vivid image of this world in your mind, and it would greatly enhance the story!
Cons:
- The basic grammar is pretty rough. This is always the thing that turns me away from stories the quickest. If you don't have a solid foundation of how to write a sentence, readers aren't going to be confident in your ability to tell a story. If you find yourself making mistakes too often, consider hiring an editor. (Even your story description feels too wordy and includes a run-on sentence, which can very quickly turn off would-be readers!)
- The second and third chapters are a little too explain-y. You don't need to spoon-feed your readers every ounce of information about the world-- trust them to figure some things out on their own.
- It's hard to tell what direction the story is headed in. It kind of feels like a super-cool-video-game-style-apocalypse-world with minimal plot direction so far. The main character already seems to have plenty of power, without any distinct goals or conflict to make it feel significant.
I think all of those cons are things you can work on, especially since you're only four episodes into this story. Your writing has a ton of potential. I think it can really be something great!