crypt101
Crypt101
Is this the actual text of the novel? It's written like a script or a forum RP. So I'd fix it to not be written in script format as the highest priority change. The English grammar needs improvement. I'd advise reading more books to pick up on the patterns of written English. For example, If the t…
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Why. Is he. Narrating. Everything? People don't narrate everything in real life =) Learn to actually describe what is happening, there's a rule in writing/comic-making/movies, etc. "Show, don't tell." Show us that the internet doesn't work, show how MC reacts (he…
In this one paragraph alone, you reiterated to the reader that your character is a neet three times. That's unnecessary repetition. You only need to mention once that the character is a neet and give an explanation on what that means. But if you are going to explain what a phrase mean, I would rec…
Hello!! I am super excited to share the cover page of my newest, and only, webcomic! I really love how this turned out... First episode should be out this month and if you want to check it out or provide feedback you can click the link below or comment respectively! [image]
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Hello, as I'm new here I'm sorry in advance for the inconvenience, hope you understand and help me grow. As i'm a writer with no art skills, my writing is about fantasy genre so I'm looking for someone to help me with an artwork and some other guidelines, It'll be unpaid for now because I'm looking …