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Hi, Jacky Ott from the United Kingdom 
I'm Avi. Nice to meet you.
Massive edit: Threw everything I said before away because it finally hit me. The scene is too detailed for something that adds near to nothing to the overall narrative of the story. It's a mental journey without any purpose; present for the sake of being present. I'm scrapping the entire episode and…
That's just a matter of style preference. I am generally wordy as it helps my perceptionalization process. But I do understand not everything is for everyone. I also don't consider that the action sequence due to how quickly the snake was defeated and captured. I only go into detail of Drischians …
I find you think that it's mundane interesting. Literally in the next two episodes, a band of genetically engineered draconic serpents try to assassinate Amish in his sleep. And they're stopped by a four-armed, four-eyed, magical burning woman. But I definitely see where you're coming from and I a…
Even if you aren't uber-experienced, I'd still love to know what those points are.
Sure, can you drop a link to your series somewhere?
I've started recently on the site and have gotten a few reads on the first episode of my novel, but not many of them have translated to reads on the rest of the episodes I have up. Am I doing something wrong? Is my first episode so bad that people read it and immediately decide it's not worth the ri…
Yep. Sick of all of the ecchi garbage running rampant.
Ugh, I really abhor your point two. I call those characters "Tits on legs" characters, because more often than not their personality is "cute" and as deep as 13-year-old on Tumblr and they only exist to be subservient to, fawn over, or jump through hoops for the approval of the male MC. It always ru…
As someone who's binged all of One Piece once upon a time, only to catch up to the current episode and immediately lose all interest, sometimes you're just bored and have nothing better to do. One piece has pacing so bad that it's a mortal sin, a never-ending cast of monotonous, one-note characters,…