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Sep 2022

Hey everyone, maybe it's just me, but I noticed that there isn't a lot of new review threads. Maybe people are scared to ask, or maybe they don't know how. Maybe it's an unknown reason. Either way, it's not good, so I guess here's something to make it easier to ask. If it turns into a flop, then it turns into a flop, I guess.

Here's a thread to post a review. After going through a bunch of reviews, I came up with an efficient template to help with the process, so please use the template below if you want your works reviewed.

I ask that more established creators help out if they can with a few reviews in order to help the community, please respond to the person you want to review:

Genre:

Type of work: (Comics/novels/art)

Review honesty: (gentle/ average/ honest/ brutally honest)

Review exchange: (Yes/no)

Length of expected review: (1 chapter/3 chapters/etc)

Target of the review: (Grammar/content/poll/flow)

Experience (Optional, but it helps the reviewer): (Beginner, novice, average, decent, established writer)

Main language (Optional but it helps the reviewer):

Status of review: (Open to everyone/ open to creaters with 25+ subs/ open to a specific person)

Link to work:

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Here's an example using my own work: ( don't take it seriously, and I won't leave a link to clutter the post)

Genre: Fantasy

Type of work: excerpts

Review honesty: brutally honest

Review exchange: yes

Length of expected review: 2 excerpts (750 words)

Target of the review: Poll-what's your favorite of the two you read?

Experience: Hobbyist writer

Main language: English

Status of review: Open to everyone

Link to work:

Genre: Historical Mystery/Thriller
Type of work: Novelette
Review honesty: average to honest
Review exchange: no
Length of expected review: depends but short review would help
Target of the review: Handling serious topics in the novelette
Experience: Novice or hobbyist
Main language: English
Status of the review: Open to everyone

Link to work:

Genre: Fantasy/Action/GL
Type of work: Comic
Review honesty: Honest
Review exchange: No
Length of expected review: Any, multiple chapters are preferred
Target of the review: Any (if judging art, please check newer episodes)
Experience: Novice
Main language: English
Status of review: Any
Link to work:

Ok, taking a quick look. Excellent choice of words and format. It really seems like you're reading a dairy entry from the early 18th century. As for the serious topics, I would say that it is properly handeled. It is hidden under a veil of fancy words, so it is not as grotesque as it would be if you put it in more modern terms. The coded messages also help with setting a more mysterious tone than serious tone, which helps lessen the impact of the topics (no spoilers), making it seem more like a big reveal than a big shock.

Hmm, here's some quick things I noticed for some writing feedback:

1) Use a more diverse dialogue between the characters: even the old wizard like character speaks in almost the same way as the MC and others. You can do this by adding more formal vocab and words that we might not use in modern times. If you need inspiration, andrew roussou does a bunch of skits on youtube and, in my opinion, does a really good job at writing diverse scripts.
https://www.youtube.com/c/AndrewRousso/videos

For example:

Change: "Brother! Luke and Gunhild need help!"

To: "Brother! We must assist Luke and Gunhild!"

2) Some narration between the transitions of scenes would help the readers pinpoint where they are in your world, so that would be helpful as well.

For the art:

Try to see if you can draw a group picture before splitting up the focus to individual people. It helps the reader know what the scenes look like and who is facing who when the focus is a singular person. You do more of this near the end of the comic, but if you increased number of people in a single panel, it would help a lot, especially during dialogues between a group of 3 or more.

Genre: Scifi/fantasy

Type of work: manga/comic

Review honesty: brutally honest

Review exchange: Yes

Length of expected review: Up to you, but newer chapters would be preferred

Target of the review: Depends what you want to read. If you want to look at older stuff, go for story and characters. If you're looking at newer stuff, go for art.

Experience (Optional, but it helps the reviewer): novice

Main language (Optional but it helps the reviewer): english

Status of review: Open to all

Link to work: https://tapas.io/series/space-pirate/info1

Genre: BL (and Action/Mystery)

Type of work: Novel

Review honesty: honest but delivered gently

Review exchange: Yes

Length of expected review: 3 chapters

Target of the review: Content/flow

Experience (Optional, but it helps the reviewer): Decent, I suppose?

Main language (Optional but it helps the reviewer): English

Status of review: Open to everyone

Link to work: https://tapas.io/series/State-of-Matter2

Genre: Horror, mystery, LGBT+
Type of work: Comic
Review honesty: Average to honest
Review exchange: No
Length of expected review: 1 chapter, though there's less than one chapter available?
Target of the review: Any, but anything relating to story or content is definitely helpful! (I know there are some pacing issues, but getting feedback on how to improve those on future pages would be helpful)
Experience: Decent
Main language: English
Status of review: Open to everyone
Link to work:

Writing: dialogue is good, but it could be more concise:

"you even managed to absorb some of the heat, didn't you?"

"I'm impressed."

"But this ends now!"

Even and managed are a bit redundant, didn't you is also a bit unnecessary in this sentence. It could be written better while keeping the same tone and style.

"I'm impressed."

"You managed to absorb some of the heat."

"But this ends now!"


"Ice magic too, and she has three elements?"

"Who is this chick!"

again, this is a battle, so you don't need to follow all the grammar rules to fit the situation. However, "too" should be added in the end to put more emphasis onto the ice magic. Otherwise, it loses focus to the three elements in the sentence, which I am guessing the reader already knows about.

"Three elements, and Ice magic too?"

"Who is this chick!?"


Another quick one from another chapter:

"Not gonna use your blade?" -----> "Gonna use your blade? " (Sounds more like a taunt, which seems to fit the panel)

"Won't need to" ______> "No need." (Situation, since they're in the middle of fighting, then it's most likely that they're getting exhausted, so try to make the battle dialogue more concise, so they speak everything you're trying to say in 1-3 sentences." Or split it up between descriptions.

"Ballsy, OK!" (All good, love it.)


For a quick review on the art:

Not really a artist guy, but I saw one panel that got me lost, so maybe move the character up a bit so the flow doesn't break.

Here's my excerpt series for the review exchange:

Genre: Fantasy

Type of work: excerpts

Review honesty: brutally honest

Review exchange: (Being exchanged)

Length of expected review: 5 excerpts ( #4, #5, #9, #10, # 11)

Target of the review: Poll-what's your top three that you read and why?

Experience: Hobbyist writer

Main language: English

Status of review: Open to everyone

Link to work:

oops, good catch on that typo! Gonna have to make sure I fix that one :joy:
Thanks for the dialogue tips, thats a bit I don't think anyone gets feedback on often

haha, LOL, I was confused cause I don't remember seeing a typo, but if you're talking about the line about using the blade, then that one's on me.

Genre: Fantasy

Type of work: Comics

Review honesty: Brutally honest

Review exchange: Yes(However many decide I'll match it)

Length of expected review: Any, multiple chapters are preferred

Target of the review: content/Flow

Experience (Optional, but it helps the reviewer): Average

Main language (Optional but it helps the reviewer): English

Status of review: Open to everyone

Link to work: https://tapas.io/series/Tear-Drops-V3-The-Insurgent-Route/info